in recent years, the world has been progressed rapidly , since crimes are the most serious issue that we have to tackle,prison become the widespread solution .while some people consider that education should be the more innovation than the former. to my perspective,i advocate both view.

In terms of justice, it seems to be more fair for the victims to punish the offender. if they do something wrong, they need to accountable for their action. punishment works like an appeasement and threat to wrong behaviors in society. thus,in other words, it has significant impact on guilty person who is called criminal psychology.this threatening directly punch in human psychology , particularly freedom.

nevertheless, at the other end of the spectrum, prison against compassion. they are human,and human is allowed to be fall .instead of pushing they to the cliff of self-doubt, guilt and lack of encouragement which only makes things worse ,especially in criminal mentally health. hence ,education could be the good cooperate option.in this way , prisoners can feel the benevolence of human and decide to turn back.meanwhile, education is essential to ensure that culprit gain self-awareness and knowledge , catalyse the fact that we can produce them the better life condition and practical job for not being relapse

henceforth, it can be stated that those solution is two-fold,apart from the former option,which is the more common one,the later is also an equally important associated factor that determines the value of treating people

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Topic: PRISON IS THE MOSST COMMOM SOLUTION TO CRIMES.HOWEVER SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT BETTER EDUCATION WILL BE MORE EFFECTIVE.TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

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in recent years, the world has been progressed rapidly , since crimes are the most serious issue that we have to tackle,prison become the widespread solution .while some people consider that education should be the more innovation than the former. to my perspective,i advocate both view.

In terms of justice, it seems to be more fair for the victims to punish the offender. if they do something wrong, they need to accountable for their action. punishment works like an appeasement and threat to wrong behaviors in society. thus,in other words, it has significant impact on guilty person who is called criminal psychology.this threatening directly punch in human psychology , particularly freedom.

nevertheless, at the other end of the spectrum, prison against compassion. they are human,and human is allowed to be fall .instead of pushing they to the cliff of self-doubt, guilt and lack of encouragement which only makes things worse ,especially in criminal mentally health. hence ,education could be the good cooperate option.in this way , prisoners can feel the benevolence of human and decide to turn back.meanwhile, education is essential to ensure that culprit gain self-awareness and knowledge , catalyse the fact that we can produce them the better life condition and practical job for not being relapse

henceforth, it can be stated that those solution is two-fold,apart from the former option,which is the more common one,the later is also an equally important associated factor that determines the value of treating people