A leaf fell down from the tree

It was nearer to the ground and free

The shrewd November wind caught it at last

However it wasn't ready to defend

That's the reason why I cried.



It was raining cats and dogs

But she was standing on the pavement in repose

Hoping for money,waiting for nobody

Selling some daisy,she was trying to survive

That's the reason why I cried cried...

Hello Dj

This line sounds a little strange:

<However it wasn't ready to defend >

– what was the meaning you wanted to convey?

In this line, I wonder whether you meant some other flower:

<Selling some daisy>

It would be unusual to sell daisies in the street; though one might sell chrysanthemums, which are members of the daisy family.

See you,

MrP
Hi Mr Pedantic,

I wanted to mean that it wasn't ready to defend itself against the strong wind of september..It didn't take precautions to be able to survive..I suppose I was looking through a window that opened to an abstract world as I was writing that poem..Cos in fact it is impossible for a leaf to take precautions Emotion: smile I'm a bit visionary maybe Emotion: stick out tongue

Thank you for your attention and precious opinions...

P.S you are right..selling some daisy was a bit irrelevant idea..

Take care
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Ah! In that case, 'defend' would need an object ('itself', I suppose).

I'd admire anyone who could sell daisies to the public. But perhaps all it needs is a little clever marketing...

MrP
Emotion: smile yes you're right ok then I'll post the corrected one..
A leaf fell down from the tree

It was nearer to the ground and free

The shrewd November wind caught it at last

However it wasn't ready to defend itself

That's the reason why I cried.



It was raining cats and dogs

But she was standing on the pavement in repose

Hoping for money,waiting for nobody

Selling some lily she was trying to survive

That's the reason why I cried..
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Hello Dj

You would probably have to say:


Selling lilies (she was trying to survive),
or


Selling lilies, trying to survive –
MrP
Selling lilies,trying to survive-

That's the reason why I cried..

Thank you very much for your help MrP Emotion: smile by the way have read my other piece of works? If so did you like them?