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It is obvious that for some recent decades, the parental skills have been considered to play an essential role in the development of children .While I hold the belief participating in classes about upbringing children is an effective method , I also suppose some alternatives should be taken into account to better situation.


It is the case that undertaking a parenting class can help parenthoods to practise more and be shared more about child-rearing.In my area,a project named Vita Rita which organized a course invite a psychological doctor ,Mrs.Pepper,to funish necessary skill for parents .Obviously, here they will receive a variety of helpful profession advices from psychological experts.In addition, they have a chance to debate this subject of interest with other one. they not only perceive new useful approach of experienced parents,but also learned by experiencing the consequences of making mistakes of others.


Besides,in my view,referencing to available sourse of information and tips how to improve their parental characters is as appropriate as enrolling in the courses.There is currently a multitute of books and academic documents which contains research of numerous well-known psychologists all over the world in the domain.Moreover, both mothers and fathers had better get closer to their children actively.As a result,it is able to promote parents-child relationship positively so as to penetrate their offspring absolutely.


To conclusion,although the courses provide a host of benificial outcomes for both parents and children.I believed it should be up to the parents to make a decision whether or not they wish to take part in such courses

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The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is obvious that for some recent decades, the (Those words add nothing to your essay. They are only a distraction.) Parental skills have always been considered to play an essential role in the development of children . (spacing error. Do not put a space before ending punctuation) While I hold the belief that participating in classes about upbringing raising children is an effective method , I also suppose (Suppose is guessing. State your opinion directly) some alternatives should be taken into account to better the situation.


It is the case that undertaking a parenting class can help parenthoods (wrong word. Parenthood is non-count, and it is a concept, not a person.) to practise more and be shared more about child-rearing.In my area,a project (This is a long noun phrase, not a sentence. It is ungrammatical.) named Vita Rita which organized a course invite a (wrong form) a psychologist, psychological doctor ,Mrs.Pepper,to funish necessary skill (wrong form) for parents .Obviously, here they will receive a variety of professional recommendations from an expert. a variety of helpful profession (wrong word) advices (wrong form. Advice is non-count.) from psychological experts.In addition, they have a chance to debate this subject of interest with each other. other one. they not only perceive (wrong word) new useful approach of experienced parents,but also learned (wrong form) by understanding experiencing the consequences of making mistakes of others.


Besides,in my view,referencing to available sourse of information and tips how to improve their parental characters is as appropriate as enrolling in the courses.There is currently a multitute of books and academic articles documents which contains (wrong form) research of numerous well-known psychologists all over the world in the domain. (wrong word) Moreover, both mothers and fathers had better get closer to their children actively.As a result,it is able to promote parents-child relationship positively so as to penetrate (wrong word) their offspring (wrong word - offspring is for animals, not people) absolutely.


To conclusion,although the courses provide a host of benificial outcomes for both parents and children.I believed (wrong form - this means that you do not believe it now.) it should be up to the parents to make a decision whether or not they wish to take part in such courses (missing punctuation.)

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It is obvious that for some recent decades, the parental skills have been considered to play an essential role in the development of children .While I hold the belief participating in classes about upbringing children is an effective method , I also suppose some alternatives should be taken into account to better situation.

It is the case that undertaking a parenting class can help parenthoods to practise more and be shared more about child-rearing.Obviously, here they will receive a variety of helpful profession advices from psychological experts.In addition, they have a chance to debate this subject of interest with other one. they not only perceive new useful approach of experienced parents,but also learned by experiencing the consequences of making mistakes of others.


Besides,in my view,referencing to available sourse of information and tips how to improve their parental characters is as appropriate as enrolling in the courses.There is currently a multitute of books and academic documents which contains research of numerous well-known psychologists all over the world in the domain.Moreover, both mothers and fathers had better get closer to their children actively.As a result,it is able to promote parents-child relationship positively so as to penetrate their offspring absolutely.


To conclusion,although the courses providea host of benificial outcomes for both parents and children.I believed it should be up to the parents to make a decision whether or not they wish to take part in such courses.

It is obvious that for some recent decades, the parental skills have been considered to play an essential role in the development of children .While I hold the belief participating in classes about upbringing children is an effective method , I also suppose some alternatives should be taken into account to better situation.


It is the case that undertaking a parenting class can help parenthoods to practise more and be shared more about child-rearing.In my area,a project named Vita Rita which organized a course invites a psychological doctor ,Mrs.Pepper,to funish necessary skill for parents .Obviously, here they will receive a variety of helpful profession advices from psychological experts.In addition, they have a chance to debate this subject of interest with other one. they not only perceive new useful approach of experienced parents,but also learned by experiencing the consequences of making mistakes of others.


Besides,in my view,referencing to available sourse of information and tips how to improve their parental characters is as appropriate as enrolling in the courses.There is currently a multitute of books and academic documents which contains research of numerous well-known psychologists all over the world in the domain.Moreover, both mothers and fathers had better get closer to their children actively.As a result,it is able to promote parents-child relationship positively so as to penetrate their offspring absolutely.


To conclusion,although the courses provide a host of benificial outcomes for both parents and children.I believed it should be up to the parents to make a decision whether or not they wish to take part in such courses

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