Given a diagram illustrating the quality of owned and rented houses in UK and Wales from 1918 to 2011. It is apparent from the information supplied that the rented houses showed a significant decrease while there was an increase in the percentage of owned houses.
Increasing from over a little bit 20% in 1918 and doubled to 50% in 1971, the proportion of these families that owned accommodation continually rose nearly 70% in 2011 before dropping to approximately 64% in 2011. In contrast with the exponential growth of owned houses, these rented one, at the beginning of the period, demonstrated the dominant position with the highest percent about 78% in 1918. However, this proportion brought a sustained decline in this figure after the high. Moreover, the following two years remained at 69%. After that, it saw a rapid fall in the percentage to somewhere in the vicinity of 31% in 2001, followed by a climb in 2011 to about 35%.

mmm... Are you trying purely to describe this graph, or have you been asked to comment on it, or perhaps interpret it? It makes a difference. In any event, your first para. contains a dreadful error (well two, actually):

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Underline: bad mistakes, explained in notes

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We are given a diagram illustrating the quality(1) of owned and rented houses in UK(2) and Wales from 1918 to 2011. It is apparent from the information supplied that, during that period, the rented houses showed a significant decrease in share, while there was a corresponding increase in the percentage of owned houses.

(1) Should be “relative proportion” - the graph tells you nothing about any quantities at all.

(2) Should be “England” - UK means England, Wales, Scotland, and Northern Ireland. These figures are only for England and Wales.


I would also add as a second paragraph:

“There are discontinuities in the data, since they display figures at a variety of intervals over the approximately 100 years covered. In particular, there should be a pair of columns representing the position at the end of the 1920s, but this is missing, though not shown as such on the graph, thus emphasizing the rate of fall in rented housing in the early part of the period.”

Is this sort of thing useful? Sorry, I'm new here.

The given bar chart illustrates a diagram illustrating the quality percentage of families living in owned properties and those living in rented ones houses in UK England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.

It is apparent from the information supplied that the percentage of families in rented accommodation houses showed experienced a significant decrease while there was an increase in the percentage of those owning their own ed houses.

Increasing from a little over a little bit 20% in 1918 and doubled doubling to 50% in 1971, the proportion of these families that owned their dwellings accommodation continually rose to nearly 70% in 2001, before dropping to approximately 64% in 2011. In contrast with the exponential that steady growth of families who owned their houses, these those who rented, one, at the beginning of the period, demonstrated the dominant position represented the majority, with the highest percent figure of about 78% in 1918. However, this proportion brought saw a sustained decline to a low of just above 30% in 2001. in this figure after the high. Moreover, the following two years remained at 69%. After that, it saw a rapid fall in the percentage to somewhere in the vicinity of 31% in 2001, That was followed by a modest climb, and the percentage in 2011 to reached about 35%.

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Note that “household” means “family”; it does not mean “house”.

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The bar chart illustrates the changes in the proportion of households owning and renting a accommodation in England and Wales in the span of period 1918 and 2011. Overall, as it observed, there was an inverse relationship between the two figures.

To be more specific, in 1918, the majority of dwellers in England and Wales rented an accommodation, at approximately under 80 percent, by a great amount, higher than the figure of people owning households, which was just over 20 percent. However, the situation was quickly reversed thereafter.The percentage of rented houses were considerably decreasing from 1918 to 2011 while owned accommodation had experienced a gradual increase in the same period. The proportion of rented and owned houses were remained equal at 50 percent in 1971. In 2011, the percentage of households renting a house bottomed out at its all-time low at slightly more than 30 percent but the owned houses steadily decreased at 63 percent.

The bar chart illustrates the changes in the proportions of households owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales in the span of period 1918 and to 2011. Overall, as it observed, there was an inverse relationship between the the two groups showed opposite trends. figures.

To be more specific, in 1918, the majority (80%) of dwellers in England and Wales rented an accommodation, at approximately under 80 percent, by a great amount, and that proportion was far higher than the figure of people owning their own dwelling, households, which was just over 20 percent. However, the situation was quickly reversed thereafter. The percentage of rented houses were considerably decreasing from decreased considerably between 1918 to and 2011, while owned accommodation had experienced a gradual increase in the same period. The proportion of rented and owned houses were remained equal at 50 percent in 1971. In 2011, the percentage of households renting a house bottomed out at its all-time low at slightly more than 30 percent, but the figure for families that owned their houses steadily decreased at to reach 63 percent.

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As we can see from the chart, there are differences and similarities between gray and black colour curves that inform us some statistics about households in owned accomodation and households in trend accomodation.

At first we can have a glance soloely to black bar chart that almost has a decreasing slope. It shows that we can conclude households in rented accommodation have decreased until 2001. Also overall looking says a decreasing slope. but in 1953 we have a little increasing in the statistics. In 2011 we have an increasing percent about households in rented accommodation.

another interpretion can be done by looking at gray bar chart. There is an increasing slope in statistics until 2001. But in 2011 the percent of households in owned accommodation has decreased.
To conclude we can have a comparison between gray and black charts. By going ahead in time the number of persons who buy a home increased and the number of persons in rent have diminished and in 1971 the both statistics are the same.

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