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The chart illustrates data about export earnings of a country in five distinct kinds of products, while the table indicates the exact margin by which those values had changed.

Overall, it is clear from the bar chart that petroleum products were always the main source of income in terms of exports, while the lowest figures were recorded in textiles. Another noticeable feature was that there was an upward trend in the majority of exports.

In 2015, the country received roughly over 60 million dollars by exporting petroleum products, while engineered goods' value was a little lower. After that, both experienced a slight increase of 3 and 8.5 percent, respectively, and reached around 62 million dollars in 2016. Gems and jewellery stood at over 40 million dollars in 2015, at which point it fell marginally by approximately 5 percent. The amounts of money earned from agricultural products and textiles were quite low, and while the former only went up slightly by under 1 percent, a substantial rise was seen in the latter, at 15.24 percent.

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Tân NguyễnThe chart illustrates data about export earnings of a country in five distinct kinds of products, while the table indicates the exact margin by which those values had changed.

1. Chart - there are many types off charts - bar charts, pie charts, Gantt charts, flow charts, eye charts and navigation charts, to mention a few. What kind of chart are you writing about?

2. illustrate - a verb for pictures and diagrams. Not plots of data.

3. Data - vague. Exactly what is on this chart?

4. five kinds - what are they?

5. indicates. Wrong verb.

6. Had changed - compared to what?

Your first sentence needs a lot of revision.

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Topic: The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


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The bar chart compares export earnings of a country in five distinct kinds of products, while the table shows the exact margin by which those values had changed in 2016 compared with the previous year

Overall, it is clear from the bar chart that petroleum products were always the main source of income in terms of exports, while the lowest figures were recorded in textiles. Another noticeable feature was that there was an upward trend in the majority of exports.

In 2015, the country received roughly over 60 million dollars by exporting petroleum products, while engineered goods' value was a little lower. After that, both experienced a slight increase of 3 and 8.5 percent, respectively, and reached around 62 million dollars in 2016. Gems and jewellery stood at over 40 million dollars in 2015, at which point it fell marginally by approximately 5 percent. The amounts of money earned from agricultural products and textiles were quite low, and while the former only went up slightly by under 1 percent, a substantial rise was seen in the latter, at 15.24 percent.

The bar chart compares export earnings of a country in for five distinct kinds of products, while the table shows the exact margin by which those values had changed in 2016 compared with the previous year (missing punctuation) (Incomplete. What are the product types? What years are in the bar chart?)

Overall, it is clear from the bar chart that (Those are "filler" words without any information. Delete them. ) petroleum products were always the main largest source of income in terms of exports, (repetitious, unnecessary. You already gave this information.) while the lowest amounts figures were recorded in for textiles. Earnings rose for four of the five categories, the exception being gems and jewellry. Another noticeable feature (Filler words - unnecessary) was that there was an upward trend in (wrong word. You need many data points to determine a trend.) the majority of exports.

In 2015, the country received roughly over 60 million (wrong word) dollars by exporting petroleum products, while the value of engineered goods' value was a little lower. After that, both had / showed experienced (wrong word. People have experiences; dollars do not.) a slight increase of 3 and 8.5 percent, respectively, and reached around 62 million dollars in 2016. Gems and jewellery stood at over 40 million (wrong word) dollars in 2015, at which point it fell marginally by approximately 5 percent. The amounts of money earned from agricultural products and textiles were quite low, and while the former only went up slightly by under less than 1 percent, a substantial rise was seen in the latter, at 15.24 percent.



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