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A glance at the chart provided reveals the fluctuation in the figures for the utilise of many information and communication technology over the world over 10 year period from 1998 to 2008.

Overall. there was a downward trend in mobile/cell phone while the others all witnessed upward trends . Another outstanding feature is that wifi was only used from 2003

As regards mobile/cell phone , it was about 5% in 1998 and experienced an exponential growth with expenditure in information and technology services reaching a peak of approximately 45% in 2006. After increasing sharply , no one spend it in the final year.

By contrast, the trends for 3 others went in opposite direction . As for the percentages of fixed broadband was 0% in 1998 and even wifi wasn't appeared at the same year while landline and internet started at approximately 10% and 5% respectively. The figures for wifi recorded a sustained increase to over 14% in 2008. Likewise, the proportions of 3 others fluctuated from 1998 to 2007 and reached the highest points of over 20%( landline), about 22% ( internet) , 15%(fixed broadband)

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Subject: Please review my IELTS essay

Message body:
Topic: The chart below shows the worldwide use of different kinds of information and communication technology (ICT) from 1998 to 2008.

My essay:

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Please read my advice for Task 1 essays. You are using several vocabulary words incorrectly, specifically, fluctuation, figure, witness, and experience. Also, your punctuation is incorrect. Do not put a space before a comma or full stop. Please correct your essay and post it in a reply to this thread.

IELTS TASK 1: Hints, Tips And Advice

Vocabulary Words For Task 1: Reference Post


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Please read my advice and understand why I marked so many wrong words.


Describe the figure in the first paragraph. This is not a good description. Do not "glance at the chart". That is not a description of anything.


A glance at the chart provided (inappropriate. Read my advice) reveals the fluctuation (Wrong word) in the figures (Wrong word) for the utilise (Wrong word) of many information and communication technology (Wrong form ) over the world over 10 year (Wrong punctuation - hyphenated) period from 1998 to 2008.

Overall. there was a downward trend in mobile/cell phone while the others all witnessed (Wrong word) upward trends . Another outstanding feature is that wifi was only used from 2003 (missing punctuation)

As regards mobile/cell phone , it was about 5% in 1998 and experienced an exponential growth with expenditure in information and technology services (There are no services in this figure.) reaching a peak of approximately 45% in 2006. (Wrong year) After increasing sharply , no one spend it in the final year.

By contrast, the trends for 3 the other three went in the opposite direction . As for the percentages of fixed broadband was 0% in 1998 and even wifi wasn't appeared (Wrong verb form) at the same year while landline and internet started at approximately 10% and 5% respectively. The figures for wifi recorded a sustained increase to over 14% in 2008. Likewise, the proportions of 3 others fluctuated from 1998 to 2007 and reached the highest points of over 20%( landline), about 22% ( internet) , 15%(fixed broadband) (missing punctuation)

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