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The pie charts show the proportion of Oscar winners for seven different genres of film in 2003 and 2008. As can be seen from the chart, between 2003 and 2008, Action film and Science Fiction film won more Oscar in 2003 than those in 2008.

The percentage of thrillers which won Oscars decreased dramatically from nearly a half to about 35%, but it still made up the largest percent in both 2 years. Whereas, there was an enormous rise in the proportion of Oscar winners for Action and Science Fiction films in 2003 and 2008. However, Oscar winners for horror films accounted for less than a fifths in 2003 and just one in twelve in 2008. Meanwhile, documentory and romance films both grew constantly their share of Oscars between 2003 and 2008. The percentage for comedy films which won Oscars stayed the same in 2003 and 2008 at about 5 percent.

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The pie charts show the proportion of Oscar winners for seven different genres of film in 2003 and 2008. As can be seen from the chart, between 2003 and 2008, Action film and Science Fiction film won more Oscar in 2003 than those in 2008.

The percentage of thrillers which won Oscars decreased dramatically from nearly a half to about 35%, but it still made up the largest percent in both 2 years. Whereas, there was an enormous rise in the proportion of Oscar winners for Action and Science Fiction films in 2003 and 2008. However, Oscar winners for horror films accounted for less than a fifths in 2003 and just one in twelve in 2008. Meanwhile, documentory and romance films both grew constantly their share of Oscars between 2003 and 2008. The percentage for comedy films which won Oscars stayed the same in 2003 and 2008 at about 5 percent.


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The pie charts show the proportion of Oscar winners for seven different genres of film in 2003 and 2008. (What are the seven genres? You need to start a new paragraph here because the topic has changed from describing the diagram to writing about the contents.) As can be seen from the chart, between 2003 and 2008, Action film and Science Fiction film won more Oscar in 2003 than those in 2008.

As can be seen from the chart, between 2003 and 2008, (The text "as can be seen..." is not useful. The reader knows you are looking at the chart. You already gave the dates in the first paragraph. Do not repeat the same words.) Action film (wrong form) and Science Fiction film (wrong form) won more Oscar (wrong form) in 2003 than they did those in 2008.

The percentage of thrillers which won Oscars decreased dramatically from nearly a half to about 35%, but it still made up the largest percent in both 2 years. Whereas, Not a good transition. There was an enormous rise in the proportion of Oscar winners for Action and Science Fiction films in 2003 and 2008. (You already wrote this in the previous paragraph. There is too much repetition.) However, Oscar winners for horror films accounted for less than a fifths (wrong form) in 2003 and just one in twelve in 2008. Meanwhile, documentory and romance films both grew constantly (You cannot use "constantly" for just two time points.) their share of Oscars between 2003 and 2008. (repetitive) The percentage for comedy films which won Oscars (repetitive) stayed the same in 2003 and 2008 (repetitive) at about 5 percent.


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The pie charts show the proportion of Oscar winners by film genre in two years, 2003 and 2008. There are seven genres shown: Thriller, Documentary, Romance, Science Fiction, Action, Comedy and Horror.

In 2003, the order of the winning genres was: Thriller, Action, Horror, Documentary, Science Fiction and Romance and Comedy. In 2008 the order was: Thriller, Action, Science Fiction, Documentary, Romance, Horror and Comedy.

Thrillers won the most Oscars in both years, dominating the other genres with a 45% share in 2003, but dropping to 33% in 2008. In second place in both years were the Action films, with 15 and 20% respectively. Romance and Comedy films were low ranking, with shares of around 5-7%. Science Fiction movies, fourth place in 2003, won more than twice as many Oscars in 2008 than in 2003, rising from a 6% share to 13%, and displacing Horror films to end in third place. Documentaries also improved, gaining 5% in 2008 over their 10% share in 2003. On the other hand, Horror films fared poorly in 2008 compared to 2003, when they were in third place. Their share fell from 13% to 7%.

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of the people who won Oscars by seven different films – Thriller, Documentary, Romance, Science Fiction, Action, Comedy, and Horror films- in the years 2003 and 2005.

Overall, it is clearly stated in the charts that Thriller films and Action films gained more Oscars awards than other types of genes. In comparisons to the percentage of Oscar’s winning in Thriller, and actions, in 2003, there were downwards trends at the end of the period, whereas the percentage of Oscar’s winners in action, science fiction, romance and documentary films showed the higher rates by 2008.

Action films accounted for nearly 15 per cent of rates of total award winners in 2003, and increased to nearly a quarter of total proportion in the year 2008. Although there was respectively about 10 percent of people who got Oscar in Science Fiction, Romance and Documentary films in 2003, its percentages showed higher rates at the end of the period.

According to the charts, from the start to end of the period, Thriller was the most Oscar winning films. In 2003, Thriller films got nearly a half of the total of Oscars, but there was a fall to around a 30 % in 2008. The proportion of Oscar awarded horror films declined from around 20 per cent in 2003 to 10 per cent in 2008. However, the numbers of Oscar winners in comedy films remained unchanged in both years at approximately 5 %.

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