i need to write a essay which contains 2 parts : phenomenon and suggestion

To conclude, if business ignor good enviromental practices, real damage to the enviroment, people's health and Hong Kong's attraction as a business centre will inevitably result. Thus, it is time for government, the public and the industries to act as a phase . Although the suggestion i memtioned may not improve the situation soon, for the long term , it at least can provide a good channel to elivate the increasing pollution problem.

1)if we write suggestion , is it good for us to write this sort of sentence(colored one )?

2)Is there any other better sentence to express this meaning?

3) Firstly ,Secondly, Moreover,etc. << I think it is a convenient and easy method for me to connect two paragraphs , i however think that if these words appear frequently in my essay , it will make my composition seem to be un-natural ? I want to know do you think so? If yes, is there any alternatives instead?
Hi Anonymous!

1) Yes, of course! It is, naturally, a good idea to emphasise short-term effects too Emotion: smile
2) How about this? Although the suggestion I mentioned may not improve the short-term situation, it will certainly provide a good long-term solution to alleviate the increasing pollution problem.
3) No, structuring essays like that is a good idea because readers appreciate a clear, lucid structure. They announce a new paragraph and immediately herald its function, so the reader will not have to look for that himself.

I hope my answers will be useful Emotion: smile

Cheers
Philologist
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situation : The essay about the advantages of doing exercise

First paragraph: Tthe advantage of doing exercise is that ...

Second paragraph Emotion: sadMoreover,)making our body healthier is another merits of doing exercise

Third paragraph :It is also ture that doing exercise regularly can ...

Do we need to use "moreover" at the beginning of paragraph 2 in order to tell reader the following paragraph is still talking about advantage?

If the first sentence of paragraph 2 "making our body healthier is another merits of doing exercise" can clearly tell the reader that we are going to talk about the good point, is there still need a connecting word " moreover" at the beginning?

These three connecting sentences sentence are similar in structure, will you feel bored when you see it ?

Thank again

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Well, it is not required to use those words. It is, however, generally recommended to use them because well-structured essays are easier to read. You can definitely leave "Moreover," where it is now, emphasising the function of that paragraph. The sentences are similar in structure, but they do not seem to be extremely boring.

You should keep in mind that people with little time generally skim essays before reading them. By adding words such as "Moreover", "Additionally", "On the one hand", "On the other hand", you enable them to skim your text quicker.

Good luck Emotion: smile
Thank^^
(1)Although the suggestion I mentioned may not improve the short-term situation, it will certainly provide a good long-term solution to alleviate the increasing pollution problem.

(2)Although the situation existing may not be completely improved, the suggestion can provide a channel for alleviating the problem of increasing air pollution. To fix the root cause, it is ;however, depend largely on the human ourselves. I certainly believe we can!

These two sentences have little different meanings, right? Which one is better for conclude the suggestion?
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