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A glance at the given diagrams illustrates the process of making chocolate from cocoa. Overall, it is obvious that there are ten prominent stages in this process: ripe red pods on a cacao tree and culminating with chocolate products.

In the beginning, cocoa comes from cacao trees grown in South America, Africa, Indonesia. When the pods are ripe and red, they are harvested and white cocoa beans are removed. These beans are used to be fermented. Subsequently, people spread them in sun to dry them. Next, they are put in large sacks and transported by train or lorry to take to the factory. They are roasted at 350C. The next step is that beans are crushed and eliminated outer shell. Coming to the final stage of the process, the inner part that is left is pressed and the chocolate is produced.

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The diagram shows how chocolate is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.


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A glance at the given diagrams (The professor does not want you to glance at the diagrams. They want you to study them closely and carefully so you can give an accurate report. Besides, there is only one diagram.)

The diagram illustrates the process of making chocolate from cocoa. (You are starting a new topic - to discuss the information content. You must begin a new paragraph.) . Overall, it is obvious that there are ten prominent stages in this process: ripe red pods on a cacao tree and culminating with chocolate products.

Overall, it is obvious that (That has no content. Do not use these dummy-it clauses) there are ten prominent stages in this process: starting with ripe red pods on a cacao tree and culminating with chocolate products.

In the beginning, cocoa comes from cacao trees grown in South America, Africa, Indonesia. (ungrammatical series. Missing conjunction.) When the pods are ripe and red, they are harvested and white cocoa beans are removed. These beans are used to be fermented. (wrong verb form) Subsequently, people spread them in sun to dry them. Next, they are put in large sacks and transported by train or lorry to take to the factory. They are roasted at 350C. The next step is that beans are crushed and the shells are thrown away. eliminated outer shell. Coming to the final stage of the process, the inner part that is left is The crushed beans are pressed and the chocolate is produced.

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