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Hello! Could you please check the paragragh of my essay.
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The first reason I think the university should offer more distance learning for students is the time issue.

It’s very convenient for a working student to manage his time on his own and not depend on the rigid class schedule. For example, working student doesn’t have to spend half of the day sitting in a class and then being very tired rush to his work in the evening. Instead he can concentrate on his studies when he has time for it, avoiding the time conflict with his job. So I think that distance learning only makes the life of a working student easier than he would be going to on –campus classes on a daily basis.
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The first reason I think the university should offer more distance learning for students is the time issue.
>> An issue is not a reason, it is a problem. So I would say. "The most important reason ....... is to save the student's time. " "To save time" is a good reason.. I would also use "most important" instead of "first", unless you will write more paragraphs on the second, third ... reasons. First is better if there are more paragraphs to follow.

It’s very convenient for a working student to manage his time on his own and not depend on the a rigid class schedule. For example, a working student doesn’t have to spend half of the day sitting in a class and then, being very tired, rush to his work in the evening. Instead, he can concentrate on his studies when he has time for it them (referring to the plural studies), avoiding the time conflict (slightly better is "time conflicts", instead of "the time conflict." It is likely that there will be more than one conflict ) with his job.
So I think that distance learning only makes the life of a working student easier than since (the clause is not a direct comparison. You cannot use the comparitive "than" when you mean because) he would not be going to on –campus classes on a daily basis.
>> The last clause is better stated "since he would not have to go to the campus on a daily basis."
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Hi! Could you check the rest of my essay, please.
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Another reason I think the universities should offer more distance learning for students is a vast access to databases. In our fast-paced computerized society, the student doesn’t have to search for hours through card catalogues and library stacks, but just only go online and find all the necessary material. Moreover, the students can ask experts online who can help him with some specific questions. Distance learning is advantageous in not only saving the student’s time but also giving a vast access to loads of materials and experts articles.

In addition to database access, the final reason I think distance learning should be offered for students is the financial relief. For example, if the college is in another city, a student doesn’t have to spend time on transportation, housing and cafeteria food. It greatly saves money when all your studies are at no distance thus helping a student to keep his full or part time job. Distance learning is quit very financial beneficiary for a working student.

There are many other reasons vouching for distance learning. Colleges and Universities should provide distance learning since it greatly accommodates the student’s need, saving their time, money and carrier.