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The line graph compares figures for daily travel of workers in the UK using the three different forms of transport (car, bus and train) during over the 60 years from 1970 to 2030. Units are measured by millions.

Overall, the car is the most popular means of transport for UK commuters travel throughout the period shown. Meanwhile, a great number of people use car and train grow gradually, the number of bus users decrease steadily.

In 1970, approximately 5 million of UK commuters drove the car on a daily basis, while the bus and train were used by about 4 million and 2 million people respectively. In the year 2000, the number of car users rose dramatically to around 7 million people. Likewise, the number of commuting rail passengers increased gradually to 3 million people after remaining stable during the 10-year period. However, there was a slight drop of approximately 0.5 million people using the bus.

By 2030, it is predicted the number of people driving the car to work will reach almost 9 million, and the train users also rise. By contrast, buses are predicted to become the less popular choice, with only under 3 million daily users.

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The line graph compares three different modes of transport (car, bus and train) in the UK in terms of the number of daily commuters which used them over a 60-year period starting in 1970. figures for daily travel of workers in the UK using the three different forms of transport (car, bus and train) during over the 60 years from 1970 to 2030. Units are measured by millions.

Overall, the car is the most popular means of transport for UK commuters travel throughout the period in question. shown. Meanwhile, Moreover, while a great the number of people using cars and trains grow shows [ *] a gradual upward trend, ly, the number of bus users follows a downward pattern. decrease steadily.

In 1970, approximately 5 million of UK commuters drove the cars on a daily basis, while the bus and train were used by about 4 million and 2 million people respectively. In By the year 2000, the number of car users rose dramatically to around 7 million people. Likewise, the number of commuting rail passengers had increased gradually to 3 million people after remaining stable during the initial 10-year period. However, there was a slight drop of approximately 0.5 million people using the bus.

By 2030, it is predicted the number of people driving the cars to work will reach almost 9 million, and the number of train users will also rise to almost 9 million. By contrast, buses are predicted to become the less least popular choice, with only under 3 million daily commuters. Users.

[ *]: You need to consider tense. Also, because this sentence talks about the past and the future, it is easier to focus on the graph and describe its trend. Thus, the verbs“follows” and “shows” are suitable there.

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Topic: The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus, or train between 1970 and 2030. (Please include all the instructions!)

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The relevant line chart furnishing a survey report on “How Britishers varying thier preferences amongst shuttle options between Public transport and own vehicle? ” And the whole data served in numbers in Millions, Since 1970 to 2030.

This line chart clearly reveals that, Car seems popular choice amongst them and tends to remain top as 5 Millions during 1970 and with continuous growth of Half Millions per year till 2010, however, it shows whopping rise in popularity by 1 million per year till 2030 and would be double even by 9 Millions. Secondly, ,Bus stands at next in option where it was 4 Million during 1970 and shown faintly decline and expected to bottomed by 3 Millions at end of year 2030.

Conversely, Train highlighting as a saleable alternatives for all shuttlers as there were 2 Millions commuters during 1970 and with steady sludge , it’s overtaking the Bus by year 2010 and may expect to rise of one and half times with 5 Millions at the end of 2030.

After all perusal, own vehicle like Cars sound unswerving choice between the UK people, However, from public transportation Train transit altering in popular choices and shall exceed the other Transit Bus with years.


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anonymousThe relevant line chart furnishing a survey report

Dean anonymous;

There are many errors and mistakes in the text you posted. It is not good English. For example, almost every word in your first paragraph has a problem.


The relevant (Relevant to what? This word is misused.) line chart (There is no such graphic as a line chart. There are pie charts and bar charts, but no line charts. Learn the names of the figures that you might be given in an IELTS exam.) furnishing (wrong word. We furnish an apartment. I can furnish you with some information.) a survey report (Wrong usage) on “How Britishers (This word is inappropriately informal or old-fashioned.) varying (wrong verb form, also the word does not fit the context. ) thier (wrong spelling) preferences amongst shuttle (wrong word? A shuttle is a van or bus that shuttles people between fixed destinations, e.g. a hotel and the airport. A personal vehicle would never be called a shuttle.) options between Public (wrong capitalization) transport and own vehicle? (wrong punctuation. This is not a question. ) ” And the whole data (unnatural collocation) served (wrong word) in numbers in Millions, (wrong capitalization, wrong punctuation) Since (wrong capitalization, wrong word.)1970 to 2030.

The next paragraphs are just as problematic. They are replete with all sorts of mistakes.

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