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Hi everybody
i wrote a paragraph about the history of UK briefly ,trying to include the most important events. and i got information from different sources , and it is the first time for me to know such information.
please correct any mistake and add any important event.
this is the paragraph

To understand the UK political system very much, it is necessary to know the history of the UK. There was a struggle to shift political power from the powerful king, who claimed that he obtained his right to rule from God, to a national parliament that was increasingly representative of ordinary people and accountable to ordinary people. After the English Civil War (1641–51) the monarchy handing over all its power to Parliament a process helped by the fact that George I and II barely spoke English and didn’t much care for governing Britain anyway and incidentally resembled Thomas Hobbes’ conception of government. Another important event in the british history is the 1688 Glorious Revolution, sometimes known as the “Bloodless Revolution,”, this revolution characterized by the struggle between king and Parliament, and most notably, between Catholic and Protestant. It resulted the overthrow of King James II of England by a union of English Parliamentarians with william of Orange or (William III). Its main results was The Bill of Rights of 1689 a document that limited the power of British monarchs, and with this document the Parliament was established as the main power in government. For England, the days of tyrannical monarchy were over. A constitutional monarchy had been born.
Thanks in advance
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Here are my suggestions (changes in bold and crossout):

To understand the current UK political system very much, it is necessary to know the history of the UK. There was a long struggle to shift political power from the powerful king, who claimed that he obtained his right to rule from God, to a national parliament that was increasingly representative of ordinary people and accountable to them ordinary people. After the English Civil War (1641–51), the restored monarchy handed ing over all much of its power to Parliament [MOVE--a process helped by the fact that George I and II barely spoke English and didn’t much care for governing Britain anyway.] (This, and incidentally, resembled Thomas Hobbes’ conception of government.??) Another important event in the British history is the 1688 Glorious Revolution, sometimes known as the “Bloodless Revolution.” This revolution was characterized by the struggle between King and Parliament, and, most notably, between Catholic and Protestant. It resulted the overthrow of King James II of England by a union of English Parliamentarians with William of Orange or (William III). Its main result was the Bill of Rights of 1689, a document that limited the power of British monarchs. and With this document, the Parliament was established as the main power in government. For England, the days of tyrannical monarchy were over. A constitutional monarchy had been born. Increasing limits on the power of the monarchy followed, a process helped by the fact that George I and II barely spoke English and didn't much care for governing Britain anyway. ETC.

I would add a new ending to this. If you pull the part about George I and George II, you could do without a new ending. The problem with your original paragraph is that you get the chronology confused. The Kings George came in the 1700s, after the English Civil War, the Commonwealth, the restoration of the monarchy, and so forth. You can't put them in the middle of the story.

I hope all this helps.
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Thanks a lot, i appreciate your help. Could you please give me an ending to my paragraph that can conclude the history untill nowadays briefly.
Sorry for disturbance
What about something like:

As the monarchy enters the 21st century, it continues to hold a symbolic and emotional power, but no longer a political one.

Hope that helps.
Thanks a lot Doctor D i appreciate your help, but i searched more and i decided to rewrite my paragraph sinse i didn't include many significant events. i will try to write an essay. Thanks again.
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