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We live in an age when Internet is one ofthe most popular tools that people use everyday. It helps our lives become moreand more convenient. However, it can’t be denied that Internet has bothpositive aspects and negative aspects.

To begin with, Internet gives us instantaccess to information due to technological advances and the presence of theInternet in every corner of the world. As a result, people can find out thelastest trends and news in real time. For example, before the Internet becomecommon, it is impossible for us to know what was happening in the world. Now,we just take a few minutes to update information. Secondly, in the Internetage, the gap between people around the earth has been shortened. Thanks toInternet, we can interact with others through chatting, forums and socialnetworking. It is true to say that distance is no longer a big problem in thedeveloping technology world.

On the other hand, Internet can also havedisadvantages. Firstly, there are many websites which contain violent or sexualimages. If youngster watch them by chance, their heart and mind will bepoisoned seriously. In addition, it is so easy for human – beings to beaddicted. Many people are now addicted to the Internet and wasting their timeto live in virtual life other than the real life. This problem affect to theircareer and relationships.

In conclusion, every coin has 2 face andInternet is the same, but it will become a perfect tool if we know how to useit correctly.

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The Internet has as many disadvantages as it does advantages. To what extent do you agree with this agreement.

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We live in an age when Internet is one ofthe most popular tools that people use everyday. It helps our lives become moreand more convenient. However, it can’t (Do not use contractions in formal writing.) be denied that Internet has bothpositive aspects and negative aspects.

You did not answer the essay prompt. "To what extent..." You must use an adverb of extent. Do you know these words?

To begin with, the Internet gives us instantaccess to information due to technological advances (That does not make sense. ) and the presence of theInternet in every corner of the world. (Repetitious) As a result, people can find out thelastest trends and news in real time. For example, before the Internet become (wrong verb form) common, it is impossible for us to know what was happening in the world. Now,we just take a few minutes to update (wrong word) information. Secondly, in the Internetage, the gap between people around the earth has been shortened. Thanks toInternet, (That is not good English.) we can interact with others through chatting, forums and socialnetworking. It is true to say that distance is no longer a big problem in thedeveloping countries. technology world.

On the other hand, Internet can also havedisadvantages. Firstly, First, there are many websites which contain violent or sexualimages. If youngster children watch them by chance, their hearts and minds will bepoisoned seriously. In addition, it is so easy for them human – beings to beaddicted. Many people are now addicted to the Internet and wasting their timeto living in a virtual life other than the not their real life. This problem affect to theircareer and relationships.

In conclusion, every coin has 2 face (wrong expression) and the Internet is the same, but it will become a perfect tool if we know how to useit correctly.