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The Internet has become indispensable part of our life. Although there are some disadvantages, i still believe that the benefits of the Internet far outweigh its drawbacks. These benefits are twofold

First of all, an essential advantage is that the Internet put all information in the world at our fingertips. In the past, finding information required hours searching in the library shelves. Most of knowledge was found in books, newspapers, magazines. Now, however, we just need a click of button to see same information. Admittedly, not everything in the Internet is helpful. There is still amount of material that is offensive or harmful, like pornography or fake news. Nonetheless, i would contend that it is inevitable because of free flow information

In addition, it is an indisputable fact that the Internet has revolutionized our way to communicate. With a web, people can able to communicate with people in anywhere at anytime. For example, teachers can start a lesson with 40 students in different places through apps like Skype or Zoom. Business people can interact with partners to conduct a contract without meeting each others. People can make friends and share their interest with someone they haven't met before. Despite of the fact that many people, specially teenagers, are spending to much time at their computer terminal rather than connect with others in the real world, most of us still have benefited greatly from the Internet

By way of conclusion, i once again restate my view that the benefits of the Internet far outweigh its drawback, because of its influence on communication and approach of information

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The Internet has become indispensable part of our life. Although there are some disadvantages, i ("i" is the ninth letter of the alphabet. It is not a person. Letters do not hold beliefs. ) still believe that the benefits of the Internet far outweigh its drawbacks. These benefits are twofold

First of all, an essential advantage is that the Internet put all the information in the world at our fingertips. In the past, finding information required hours searching in the library shelves. Most of knowledge was found in books, newspapers, magazines. (Ungrammatical series. missing conjunction) Now, however, we just need a click of button to see the same information. Admittedly, not everything in the Internet is helpful. There is still an amount of material that is offensive or harmful, like pornography or fake news. Nonetheless, i would contend that it is inevitable because of the free flow information (missing punctuation.)

In addition, it is an indisputable fact that the Internet has revolutionized our way to communicate. With modern electronic networks and access devices, a web, (incorrect) people can able (wrong verb form) to communicate with people in anywhere at anytime. For example, teachers can start a lesson with 40 students in different places through apps like Skype or Zoom. Business people can interact with partners to conduct a contract without meeting each others. (wrong form) People can make friends and share their interest with someone they haven't met before. Despite of the fact that many people, specially teenagers, are spending to (wrong word) much time at their computer terminal rather than connecting with others face-to-face, in the real world, most of us still have benefited greatly from the Internet

By way of conclusion, i (wrong) once again restate (This is an error of style. "restate" means "state once again" so you wrote " I once again state once again. " That is just awful.) my view that the benefits of the Internet far outweigh its drawback, (There is only one?) because of its influence on communication and approach of information (Not a good phrase.) (missing punctuation.)

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Topic: The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What are your opinions on this?

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thanks for your comments. I very appreciate that ^.^