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Some people argue that generating profits is the prime concern of corporations, and these organizations are not required to have social duties. While I accept that this argument is slightly reasonable, I believe that the simultaneous combination of both producing money and social duties would generate more meaningful results than making money solely.


On the one hand, the majority of companies treat making money as a prime aim because of a large number of driving factors. Firstly, the more firm revenue is generated, the more tax budget is created in a nation. Indeed, when a company has high profit, they would give more for income tax; thus, the government has more budget to invest to improve public infrastructures such as roads, transportation, monuments, public space, which could substantially boost citizen’s living quality. Furthermore, the company’s financial budget plays an integral role in creating job opportunities. When a company is in a profitable situation, it tends to establish new agencies or subsidiaries, which provides a host of vacancies for those who are unemployed.


On the other hand, I contend that corporations should be encouraged to take social obligation into consideration alongside maximizing profits because of a number of compelling reasons. One reason is that a company’s production process may lead to environmental degradation. For examples, contaminated water eliminated from factories’ production process needs a lot of fee to be processed. Because of that, many factories decided to dump illegally into water sources so that damage to marine life and to the environment as a whole. Another reason is that philanthropic activities are essential for an optimistic brand image. If entrepreneurs conduct more charitable projects for the public such as giving financial support to people experiencing disasters or facilitating miserable children to have an adequate education, this would make people have a favorable opinion of their business.


In conclusion, while I agree that maximizing revenue is the key factor that is compulsory for each corporation’s prosperity, I would contend that social accountability should also be encouraged simultaneously.

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file green 887Some people argue that generating profits is the prime concern of corporations, and these organizations are not required to have social duties. While I accept that this argument is slightly reasonable,

You did not answer the essay prompt clearly. The examiner is looking for an answer to this question: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is good to know a good handful of adverbs of extent because this is a very common prompt in IELTS Task 2 essays.

Complete agreement / disagreement:
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completely
fully
totally
wholeheartedly
unreservedly
with no reservations
without reservation
unequivocally
unquestionably
with no hesitation
unconditionally

Partial agreement / disagreement:
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somewhat
partially
partly
to some extent / to a limited extent / to a point
with (some / certain / a few) reservations
conditionally


You did not answer the task correctly. This is an agree/disagree essay. It is not a "discuss both views" essay.

You lose points in "task response" if you do not answer the right essay type.

You do not have the essay writing skills for writing a "partial agreement." Only very advanced and experienced writers can avoid writing a "discuss both views" essay when the task is "agree/disagree."

You have to take one side, and write two body paragraphs supporting your opinion.

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Some people argue that generating profits is the prime concern of corporations, and these organizations are not required to have social duties. I totally disagree, since doing projects that benefit the community generates intangible value called goodwill. While I accept that this argument is slightly reasonable, I believe that the simultaneous combination of both producing money and social duties would generate more meaningful results than making money solely.

https://financial-dictionary.thefreedictionary.com/goodwill

Delete the next paragraph. It does not argue in favor of your opinion. The transition phrases "on the one hand"/" on the other hand" are only for "discuss both views" or "advantages/disadvantages" essays. Do not use these phrases for agree/disagree essays.

The yellow highlighted words have errors.

On the one hand, the majority of companies treat making money as a prime aim because of a large number of driving factors. Firstly, the more firm revenue is generated, the more tax budget is created in a nation. Indeed, when a company has high profit, they would give more for income tax; thus, the government has more budget to invest to improve public infrastructures such as roads, transportation, monuments, public space, which could substantially boost citizen’s living quality. Furthermore, the company’s financial budget plays an integral role in creating job opportunities. When a company is in a profitable situation, it tends to establish new agencies or subsidiaries, which provides a host of vacancies for those who are unemployed.

On the other hand, I contend that corporations should be encouraged to take social obligation into consideration alongside maximizing profits because of a number of compelling reasons. (Do not write your thesis statement in a body paragraph. It belongs only in the first paragraph and conclusion.)

One reason is that a company’s production process may lead to environmental degradation. For examples, contaminated water eliminated from factories’ production process needs a lot of fee (wrong usage) to be processed. Because of that, many factories decided to dump illegally into water sources so that damage to marine life and to the environment as a whole. (That is completely off-topic. It is not about illegal corporate activities.) Another reason is that philanthropic activities are essential for an optimistic (wrong word) brand image. If entrepreneurs (wrong word) conduct more charitable projects for the public such as giving financial support to people experiencing disasters or facilitating (wrong word) miserable children to have an adequate education, this would make people have a favorable opinion of their business.


In conclusion, while I agree that maximizing revenue is the key factor that is compulsory for each corporation’s prosperity, I would contend that social accountability should also be a corporate objective. encouraged simultaneously.

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