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The table shows five modes of vehicles used by Australian people in 2010,2012,2014. It is noticeable that all vehicles increased during the period shown. While passenger vehicles were the most used form of transport in both years, the motorcycles saw the highest growth in use. In 2010, there were respective 11.8 million and 2,3 million in passenger and commercial vehicles. Passenger vehicles went up by 12,7 million in 2012 before peaking at 13 million in 2014, with an overall increase of 10,2 %. The commercial vehicles shared the same upward trend by a rising total of 4 million until 2014 (translating to a 17.4% increase). The respective starting points for three types of vehicles which less common were 540,000 motorcycles, 384,000 heavy trucks, and 106,000 light trucks. Motorcycles rose rapidly by around 30% to 709.000 in 2014. Heavy trucks gained totaling 8% which accounted for 416.000 at the end of the period. Finally, Light trucks went up by 23.5% to 131.000 in 2014.

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Here is an appropriate outline for Task 1.

The essay structure is:

Paragraph #1: Describe the table
Paragraph #2: Write the main features (2 or 3)
Paragraph #3: Write some details, combining categories and focusing on comparisons.


You never mentioned that the table contains the numbers of these different types of vehicles.
You did not tell the reader what the different types are.
You did not tell the reader that there are percentages in the table, and what they are.


The table shows five modes (Wrong word. ) of vehicles used by Australian people in 2010,2012,2014. (Spacing error. Put a space after a comma.) It is noticeable that all vehicles increased (Were there bigger trucks and cars?) during the period shown. While passenger vehicles were the most used form of transport in both (Both means 2. That is not correct) years, the motorcycles saw (Motorcycles cannot see anything. They have no eyes.) the highest growth in use. In 2010, there were respective 11.8 million and 2,3 million in passenger and commercial vehicles. Passenger vehicles went up by 12,7 million in 2012 before peaking (wrong word) at 13 million in 2014, with an overall increase of 10,2 %. The commercial vehicles shared the same upward trend (not good - you need a line graph or lots of values to make a trend) by a rising total of 4 million until 2014 (translating to a 17.4% increase). The respective starting points for three types of vehicles which less common (missing verb) were 540,000 motorcycles, 384,000 heavy trucks, and 106,000 light trucks. Motorcycles rose rapidly by around 30% to 709.000 in 2014. Heavy trucks gained totaling 8% which accounted for 416.000 at the end of the period. Finally, Light trucks went up by 23.5% to 131.000 in 2014.

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Here is a sample essay. To get the highest marks, you have to combine categories and make many comparisons, not just copy the values from the table to your writing.



The table lists the numbers of registered vehicles in Australia at three different points of time, 2010, 2012 and 2014. Numbers are given for each of five categories: passenger vehicles, commercial vehicles, motorcycles, heavy trucks and light trucks.

Overall, the greatest number of registrations were for passenger vehicles, more than five times as many as the second place category, commercial vehicles, and ten times that of the smallest category, light trucks. The rank order of the categories did not change in these years.

In total, Australia had over 15 million registered vehicles in 2010 and 17 million in 2014. Every category rose in numbers, with percentage changes ranging from 8 to 31 percent. In 2010, there were 11.8 million passenger cars and that went up to 13 million, or 10.2%. However, that was the second smallest increase of all types. Only heavy trucks had a smaller gain, 8.3%, from 384 to 416 thousand. There were over a half million motorcycles registered in 2010, and their numbers went up by nearly 31%, ending at 709 thousand.

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The table shows five modes of vehicles used by Australian people in 2010,2012,2014. It is noticeable that all vehicles increased during the period shown. While passenger vehicles were the most used form of transport in both years, the motorcycles saw the highest growth in use. In 2010, there were respective 11.8 million and 2,3 million in passenger and commercial vehicles. Passenger vehicles went up by 12,7 million in 2012 before peaking at 13 million in 2014, with an overall increase of 10,2 %. The commercial vehicles shared the same upward trend by a rising total of 4 million until 2014 (translating to a 17.4% increase). The respective starting points for three types of vehicles which less common were 540,000 motorcycles, 384,000 heavy trucks, and 106,000 light trucks. Motorcycles rose rapidly by around 30% to 709.000 in 2014. Heavy trucks gained totaling 8% which accounted for 416.000 at the end of the period. Finally, Light trucks went up by 23.5% to 131.000 in 2014.

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The table shows five modes of vehicles used by Australian people in 2010,2012,2014. It is noticeable that all vehicles increased during the period shown. While passenger vehicles were the most used form of transport in both years, the motorcycles saw the highest growth in use. In 2010, there were respective 11.8 million and 2,3 million in passenger and commercial vehicles. Passenger vehicles went up by 12,7 million in 2012 before peaking at 13 million in 2014, with an overall increase of 10,2 %. The commercial vehicles shared the same upward trend by a rising total of 4 million until 2014 (translating to a 17.4% increase). The respective starting points for three types of vehicles which less common were 540,000 motorcycles, 384,000 heavy trucks, and 106,000 light trucks. Motorcycles rose rapidly by around 30% to 709.000 in 2014. Heavy trucks gained totaling 8% which accounted for 416.000 at the end of the period. Finally, Light trucks went up by 23.5% to 131.000 in 2014.


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The table shows the number of registered vehicles in Australia according to the five different categories namely passenger vehicles, commercial vehicles, motorcycles, heavy trucks, light trucks in 2010, 2012, and 2014.

Overall, It is noticeable that each type of vehicle rose over the period shown. While passenger vehicles were registered the greatest number, motorcycles had the highest change in all types.

In total, Australia had over 15 million registered vehicles in 2010 and 17 million in 2014, with the percentage change of each category ranging from 8 to 31%. In 2010, passenger vehicles were more than five times as many as the second category, commercial vehicles, with 11,8 million. This figure went up to 13 million, or 10,2 % in 2014. However, that was the second smallest growth of all types. The only heavy trucks had a smaller gain, 8,3%, from 384,000 to 416,000. There were more than a half-million motorcycles in 2010, and that rose to 131,000 in 2014, which was an increase of 31% in 2014. The last category. The smallest number of registered vehicles were light trucks, with just more than 100 000 during each year.

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The table shows the number of registered vehicles in Australia in according to the five different categories, namely passenger vehicles, commercial vehicles, motorcycles, heavy trucks, and light trucks, in 2010, 2012, and 2014. (Lists of items must have a conjunction before the last one.)

Overall, It is noticeable that (Incorrect capitalization. Also, this dummy-it clause has no information content. Avoid these clauses.) each numbers for every type of vehicle rose over the period shown. While passenger vehicles were registered had the greatest number of registrations, motorcycles had the highest change out of in all the types.

In total, Australia had over 15 million registered vehicles in 2010 and 17 million in 2014, with the percentage change of in each category ranging from 8 to 31%. In 2010, passenger vehicles there were more than five times as many passenger vehicles as the second category, commercial vehicles, with 11,8 million. This figure (wrong word. Just use the pronoun, "this") went up to 13 million, or 10,2 % in 2014. However, that was the second smallest growth of all the types. The only heavy trucks had a smaller gain, 8,3%, from 384,000 to 416,000. There were more than a half-million (no hyphen) motorcycles in 2010, and that rose to 131,000 in 2014, which was an increase of 31% in 2014. (Do not repeat this in the same sentence) The last category. The smallest number of registered vehicles were light trucks, with just more than 100 000 during each year.