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This is my writing for WRITING IELTS TASK 1. Please help me evaluate the writing and suggest something I can improve. Thank you.

The table presents the percentage of household income which is spent monthly on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment by five European countries.

Overall, the percentages of spending on food & drink and housing account for a majority of income of people in five European nations whereas those figures of clothing and entertainment are significantly low.

According to the table, people in Turkey and Spain spend most of their income on Food & Drink at 36% and 31% respectively, compared to 25% spending in France and 27% of British people. Similarity, the proportion of income spends on housing in France, Germany and UK are relatively high at 31%, 33%, and 37% respectively.

On the contrary, the spending on entertainment and clothing are noticeably low in five nations. Britain and Turkey have the lowest spending on entertainment at 11% in Britain and 10% in Turkey, compared to the expenditure on entertainment of remaining three nations which are from 13% to 19%. People in Europe spend the least for clothing which only range from 7% to 15%.

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The table presents the percentage of household income which is spent monthly on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment in each of five European countries. (Which five countries?)

Overall, the percentages of spending on food & drink and housing account for a majority of income of people in these five European nations whereas those figures of clothing and entertainment are significantly lower.

According to the table, People in Turkey and Spain spend most of their income on Food & Drink at 36% and 31% respectively, compared to 25% spending in France and 27% in the UK of British people. Similarity, the proportion of income spends (spent) on housing in France, Germany and UK are relatively high at 31%, 33%, and 37% respectively.

On the contrary, the spending on entertainment and clothing are noticeably low in these five nations. Britain and Turkey have the lowest spending on entertainment at 11% in Britain and 10% in Turkey, compared to the expenditure on entertainment of the remaining three nations which are from 13% to 19%. People in Europe spend the least for clothing which only ranges from 7% to 15%.