In recent decades, the issue of whether the proliferation of technology, especially communication technology, exerts detrimental outcomes on the relationship among people or not has been receiving a great deal of public attention. Although the impacts of technology on social relationship are not without drawbacks, the upsides will justify these.

Some compelling reasons can be cited to explain why the technology advancement creates negative influences on people’s relationship. First, since social networking users have excessive exposure to virtual world, there is high possibility that they would abuse social media to have conversation with either relatives or acquaintances. This greatly yields to ease the quality of human relationships, potentially destroying them in the near future. Second, most of today’s people, especially busy ones, are unable to build or maintain their social relationship due to too much time and effort devotion on boosting work productivity. For example, workload keeps them too busy to nurture their relationships with friends, or even with family, resulting in fracturing their concrete relationships.

Under no circumstances should the positive implications of technology on cultivating human relationship be marginalized. Initially, thanks to the proliferation of technology, it has made communication accessible, which helps users keep in touch with the others at ease. For examples, a touch-screen allows people to have conversation with each other, which in turn promoting their social behavior. Additionally, by harnessing communication technology, citizens can expand their social circle. This means that people are able to make friends regardless of geographical barriers, making people around the globe socialized.

In conclusion, there are still some existed disadvantages of technology on human relationship; yet, the dazzling benefits of it will be far more significant thanks to accessibility characteristic and no barrier connection.

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Topic: The technology development has affected social relationship from person to person. Do the positive aspects of this trend outweigh the negative aspects? (This has several mistakes. It is not good native English. Please copy all the instructions carefully and accurately.)

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The topic you posted is not good English. We need to know the topic exactly, so we can give accurate feedback. I assume this is the correct version for feedback on the opening paragraph.

 Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Is this a positive or negative development?

In recent decades, the issue of whether the proliferation (not a good word) of technology, especially communication technology, exerts detrimental outcomes on the relationship (wrong form) among people or not has been receiving a great deal of public attention. (That is not a true statement. I have not seen any evidence of any public attention on this question. If you write false statements, the reader will assume that the rest of your essay is not true. It is a very poor way to begin an academic essay.)

Although the impacts of technology on social relationship (wrong form) are not without drawbacks, the upsides will justify these. (That makes no sense. Impacts can be favorable and good or unfavorable or bad. "Drawbacks and upsides" do not work here. )

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