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In this modern era, environmental issues have been more care for by the government in Vietnam. The rise of numerous factories, manufacturing corporations, and industrial estates engenders water pollution to the surroundings and the life of local residents. This essay will discuss some reasons why this has occurred and examine the consequences of this worrying trend.

An essential reason, as well as the biggest issue for environmental problems, is the industrial zones which create water pollution. Instead of money-consuming for process wastewater treatment but the leaders of industry who discharge waste-water direct into the rivers, even create smelly, uncomfortable for the inhabitants live nearby. For example, The event fish die series for Formosa toxics at Hà Tĩnh province causes is the company Formosa not non-compliance with the process of treating wastewater discharged into the river causes mass fish deaths and people around can not live because of the toxicity it causes. Another reason is the lack of knowledge of humans, they waste rubbish into the river, lake. For instance, when you walk out at Sai Gon river, you can be seen many people not only release fish but also drop with nylon up the river. Moreover, this nylon can get stuck on aquatic organisms and cause them to die, and will make the water more polluted.

The effects of this have been and will continue to be very serious. Firstly, there are many places that do not have fresh water to drink and use for basic demands because of the pollution of water sources that result from the industrial waste of many factories. At the same time causing a lot of losses to the fishery industry. Moreover, the rate of people suffering from acute and chronic diseases related to water pollution such as conjunctivitis, stomach, cancer... is increasing. For example, when using arsenic-contaminated water for drinking, people can get cancer, of which skin cancer is common. Therefore, we need to protect the water in our area.

In my opinion, the best solution for this problem is improving the environmental awareness of people by a suitable education program that can educate people about the importance and essential role of the environment. In addition, the government should have more heavy penalties for any action that does not follow the law and harms nature. If there is effective cooperation between people and organizations, the environment will get better in the near future.

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There are many environmental issues facing Vietnam. In your opinion, what are the causes and effects of the biggest environmental issue that Vietnam must confront?


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In this modern era, (Unnatural. Use present tense verbs to indicate the time frame.) Some major environmental issues have been recognized more care for by the government in Vietnam. The rise of numerous factories, manufacturing corporations, and industrial estates has led to engenders water pollution which has affected to the surroundings and the lives life of local residents. In recent years, the fishing industry has felt the impact, and certain diseases are more frequently diagnosed. This essay will discuss some reasons why this has occurred and examine the consequences of this worrying trend.

Never mention your essay. The reader knows you are writing an essay. They know the topic and instructions. Do not tell the reader "I am going to write an essay and follow the instructions" Instead, write the main point of your essay. You already wrote about the problem and the cause. You just need another sentence about the effects. I put one in for you as an example.


An essential reason for, as well as the biggest ("Big" and "huge" are words for baby books. Use higher-level words in academic writing.) issue largest source of environmental problems, are is the industrial zones chemical and manufacturing plants which create water pollution. Instead of money-consuming for process installing wastewater treatment systems but the leaders of industry who discharge waste-water (That does not make sense - the president of the company does not do this.) directly into the rivers, even create smelly, uncomfortable (poor English - ungrammatical) for the inhabitants live nearby. (wrong grammar) For example, The (wrong form) event fish die series (That does not make sense.) for Formosa toxics at Hà Tĩnh province causes is the company Formosa not non-compliance with the process of treating wastewater discharged into the river causes mass fish deaths and people around can not live because of the toxicity it causes. (Very bad English. It is not grammatical.) Another reason is the lack of knowledge of humans, (wrong word) they waste (wrong word) rubbish into the river, lake. For instance, when you walk out at Sai Gon river, you can be seen (wrong verb form) many people not only release fish but also drop with nylon up (wrong phrase) the river. Moreover, this nylon (Nylon is a fabric used for making sportswear, and it is also used to make rope.) can get stuck on aquatic organisms and cause them to die, and will make the water more polluted.

The effects of this have been and will continue to be very serious. Firstly, First, there are many places that do not have fresh water to drink and use for bathing and cooking basic demands because of the pollution of water sources that result from the industrial waste of many factories. At the same time causing a lot of losses to the fishery industry. (Fragment, not a sentence) Moreover, the number rate of people suffering from acute and chronic diseases related to water pollution such as conjunctivitis, stomach, (stomach is not a disease) cancer... (Do not use ellipses, "etc." or "and so on" in formal essays.) is increasing. For example, when using arsenic-contaminated water for drinking, people can get cancer, of which skin cancer is common. Therefore, we need to protect the water in our area.

Ceci 1310: There are many environmental issues facing Vietnam. In your opinion, what are the causes and effects of the biggest environmental issue that Vietnam must confront?

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In my opinion, the best solution for this problem is improving the environmental awareness of people by a suitable education program that can educate people about the importance and essential role of the environment. In addition, the government should have more heavy penalties for any action that does not follow the law and harms nature. If there is effective cooperation between people and organizations, the environment will get better in the near future.