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Dear teachers,

I need your help in revising this story.

There was an old woman and her married son, his wife was an evil woman. Everyday she was telling her husband to take his mother to the nursery home. Untiringly, she was constantly filling his head with evil ideas untill he surrendered to her. They decided to take her to the beach, her son told her he's taking her to a beach picnic so they went, after sitting for a little while her son told her he's going to bring some coffee and he gave her note of his phone number and asked her to give this note to anyone incase she wanted to contact him the went to his way. The mother waited and waited for her son, he never came back. All this time she was worried something happened to her son that it took him long to come back, she was hungry so she had to eat meal leftovers. A group of young men saw her alone and hurried to her asking her about her whatabouts, she told them the story and gave them the note. When they read the note they were shocked to know that sun gave up his mother to anyone sees the note. They decided not to tell the poor old lady so they asked her to come with them, she refused believing her son will come back, the boys left her alone, upon insisting. That night, the boy who read the note couldn't go to sleep so he hurried back to the old lady only to find her dead. He wept bitterly to find that she died out of extreme fear that something terrible has happened to her son. When the son knew about this, he went mad, and now he's an in-patient in a mental hospital.
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Hi,

There was an old woman and her married son, whose wife was an evil woman. Every day, she told her husband to take his mother to the nursing home. Untiringly, she constantly filled his head with evil ideas, until he surrendered to her. They decided to take his mother to the beach. Her son told her he was taking her to a beach picnic, so they went. After sitting for a little while her son told her he wass going to get some coffee. He gave her a note of his phone number and told her to give this note to anyone, in case she wanted to get in touch with him while he was gone.

The mother waited and waited for her son, but he never came back. All this time she was worried that something had happened to him, because it was takimg him so long to come back. She was hungry so she had to eat the leftovers from the picnic. A group of young men saw her alone and hurried to her, asking her about her situation. She told them the story and gave them the note. When they read the note they were shocked to realize that the son had given up his mother to anyone who saw the note. I thought it had his phone number?

They decided not to tell the poor old lady, so they asked her to come with them. She refused, believing her son wouldl come back. The boys left her alone, because she insisted. That night, the boy who read the note could not go to sleep so he hurried back to the old lady only to find her dead. He wept bitterly to find that she died out of extreme fear that something terrible has happened to her son. When the son learned about this, he went mad, and now he's a patient in a mental hospital.

Clive
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meal lefovers that was left on the beach!! I don't know if i can say that. Emotion: smile
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