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Hi teachers,
Could you please help edit my sentences below?:

1/ " In my country, when a person comes to the age of 15 ,he must go to the Social Order and Administration Management Police Office where police will take a picture of him or her and fingerprint him or her ,and then they will give him or her an appointment note which tells him or her the date to come back to get an identification card ."
2/Yesterday my mom took me to the Social Order and Administration Management Police Office to do an ID card.
3/ Tomorrow his mother will go the ward people's committe to do a birth certificate for her newly-born child

Thank you in advance
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Hi,
Could you please help edit my sentences below?:

1/ " In my country, when a person comes to the age of 15 ,he must go to the Social Order and Administration Management Police Office where police will take a picture of him or her and fingerprint him or her ,and then they will give him or her an appointment note which tells him or her the date to come back to get an identification card ."
2/Yesterday my mom took me to the Social Order and Administration Management Police Office to do an ID card.
3/ Tomorrow his mother will go the ward people's committe to do a birth certificate for her newly-born child
Could you please help edit my sentences below?:

1/ " In my country, when a person reaches the age of 15, he or she must go to the Social Order and Administration Management Police Office, where police will take a picture of him and fingerprint him. Then they will give him or her an appointment note which tells him the date to come back to get an identification card ."
2/Yesterday my mom took me to the Social Order and Administration Management Police Office to get an ID card.
3/ Tomorrow his mother will go the ward people's committee to get a birth certificate for her newly-born child.

Best wishes, Clive
Thank you Clive very much ,but in (2) and (3) I don't mean to say "go to these agencies to obtain an ID card or a birth certificate '. I just mean to go to these agencies to do some necessary procedures so that after that they will issue an ID card and a birth certificate for me and for the new-born child.
Can I say like this?:

Yesterday my mom took me to the Social Order and Administration Management Police Office to register an ID card/to apply for issuance of an ID card.

Tomorrow his mother will go to the ward people's committee to register a birth certificate for her newly-born child/to apply for issuance of a birth certificate for her newly-born child .

I hope you will understand what I reaaly want to say . Sorry about my poor English.

Best wishes
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Hi again,

You can just say 'apply for' in both cases.

Clive
"Tomorrow his mother will go the ward people's committe"

Probably, you have left out the "to" here.
Thank you Clive , but I don't know whether I should say " apply for a birth certificate/an ID card" or "apply for issuance of a birth certificate/an ID card".

Best wishes
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Hi,
You don't need to talk about 'issuance'. If you apply for something, that already means that you are asking for someone to issue it to you.
Clive
Thank you Clive ever so much