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A knock on my door. Sleepy as I had almost fallen asleep, I rolled out of bed onto my week feet. I dragged myself over to the door. Too tired to look through the peephole, I opened a crack with the bolt still on, cursing whoever was disturbing myself at this late hour. But much to my pleasant surprise, a sexy doll-like young woman, probably in her early twenties, looked at me with a wide smile and big brown eyes. It was a bit chilly. I could feel the cool breeze brushing against my exposed neck, hands and feet, wearing only boxers under my blue house robe. She stood calmly there, seemingly not shivering, with only her sheer, short red nightie covering her petite body, exposing her vulnerable arms, shoulders and most of her legs. Though the hallway was dim, you could tell she wasn't wearing a bra. My eyes were wide open by now and when I was about to ask her why she rang my doorbell, she put a hand on my door and gently said, "Can I come in?" My natural answer was no but before the word came out of my mouth, my mouth swallowed and replaced it as if it had a brain of its own, "Yes, sure". I shut the door, unlocked it and open it wide with an inviting gesture, "Come on in".

Are there any mistakes?

Thanks in advance.
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Hi New2, Yes, there are several mistakes - not up to your usual standards. If you have time, you might give it one more proofreading. (Some long stretches are free of errors.)

Best wishes, - A.
Avangi, Thanks for your reply. I've been reading novels and mimicking their styles. Could you tell me what's wong so I have an idea? Below are some of my questions.

A knock on my door (I deliberately make it an incomplete sentence). Sleepy as I had almost fallen asleep, I rolled out of bed onto (Is onto not right?) my week feet. I dragged myself over to the door. Too tired to look through the peephole, I opened a crack (It's a phrase I've learned recently) with the bolt still on, cursing whoever was disturbing myself at this late hour. But much to my pleasant surprise, a sexy doll-like young woman, probably in her early twenties, looked at me with a wide smile and big brown eyes. It was a bit chilly. I could feel the cool breeze brushing against (Is brushing against not a good description?) my exposed neck, hands and feet, wearing only boxers under my blue house robe. She stood calmly there (Should I reverse it to be 'there calmly'?), seemingly not shivering, with only (Should I replace with only with 'had on'?) her sheer, short red nightie covering her petite body, exposing her vulnerable arms, shoulders and most of her legs. Though the hallway was dim, you could tell she wasn't wearing a bra. My eyes were wide open by now and when I was about to ask her why she rang my doorbell, she put a hand on my door and gently said, "Can I come in?" My natural answer was no but before the word came out of my mouth, my mouth swallowed and replaced it as if it had a brain of its own, "Yes, sure". I shut the door, unlocked it and open it wide with an inviting gesture, "Come on in".
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New2grammarmy week feet.
weak or week????
I can't believe I missed that. I guess it was because it sounded right when I proofread. Thanks, Opitlang.
By the way, Is bolt correctly used or Should it be latch? It's a device installed on the door where a chain attached to the wall latches a piece bolted into the door.
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I would say - I opened the door with/keeping the chain on - (then you don't need crack as it is clear that you spoke through the small gap as the chain was still on). I wouldn't call the chain a latch - I know some people may do, but I don't.

For me, you find a latch on a door, gate, window, - it keeps the door/gate/window closed, but it does not lock it.
Thank you, Optilang. What do you call the built-in lock that usually goes with what you call latch? Just LOCK?
I don't want to divert you too far away from your main post here.

Yes, I just call it a lock - lock the gate/door/window - activate the lock on the latch - if that is the lock used.
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