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Director of the Program
Department of ABC
University of ABC

February 2, 2008

I am writing to apply for the Master’s Programme in ***.

I am confident that the programme corresponds well with my plans of becoming a specialist in marketing field. It is my dream and desire to be admitted in *** and pursue my *** studies in the field of Marketing.

My educational background is well versed with principles & practices of the Marketing field. I have successfully completed a 3 years BBA (HONS)-IT program in 2004. My studies have guided me through systematic researching, analytical thinking, Management of resources and information evaluation. I continued my studies & completed an MBA with specialization in marketing field in December 2005.

Marketing Management, Advertising, Sales Management, Services Marketing, Business Strategy and Leadership were among my favourite subjects in MBA.



I love to play computer strategic games, Chess game I mostly play with my compute which I never won, Graphics, Animations, Web Designing, Reading something interesting online, cooking, outing, meeting just everyone in a group and selecting good people as my close friends are my hobbies. I feel no shame in meeting new people, talking them, and playing jokes.



After my studies I planned to start my career from an international level, In June 2006 I was appointed as an Operations Supervisor in a Multibillionaire Retailing Firm in . It’s a fruitful experience of a Supermarket Management with thousands of brands, toughest competition among different brands and huge variety of products. Such an experience I was unable to get in my country.

My contract of two years is going to expire and I am already offered a Store Manager position for next contract. But I realize the strong inspiration in myself to further study to become a marketing specialist. I cannot be a specialist without having perfect knowledge of a specific field in Marketing.

While In store I keep on Analysing top 5 brands of a product category. For Example in Fresh Milk & Juices category in Saudi Arabia the key brands are ALMARAI, NADEC, NADA, . I make weekly/monthly analysis on sales figure and try to find out why ALMARAI is number 1. The answer is ALMARAI BRAND Manager Focuses on high quality product (Core product taste, freshness, design to packing), Promotions (60% shelf space rented of all fresh section, Advertising), Placing/delivering daily by proper Vehicles and huge network of branches in whole Saudia.

Education from *** is affordable for me as compared to other *** countries. *** is a good safer place for other nations. *** is in between the best universities in *** and secondly ***University has a course offer (***) which relates to my goals. That’s why it is number one in my selection criteria.

Getting one year Masters from ***means becoming a Specialist (or a step towards it). I can put a high price for my services. I will achieve my first objective of ‘Financial Growth’ I will be differentiated from my competitors by having Masters from *** University. I already met many Nations in and will further learn while living in a new culture. I will make new friends from , will learn their life style it will achieve my second objective ‘Personal Growth’. When I will complete the Masters degree I will already achieve my third objective of ‘Professional Growth’.

The study will equip me with the necessary skills to continue to acquire new knowledge and understanding throughout my entire working life. I believe that the combination of my past experiences and academic knowledge will qualify me as an University of *** student candidate.
I have struck out unnecessary or inappropriate verbiage, made some corrections (in bold). You may also have to fix the sentence structure to correct for my deletions.

February 2, 2008

Director of the Program
Department of ABC
University of ABC

Dear Dr Smith:
I am writing to apply for the Master’s Programme in ***.

I am confident that the programme corresponds well with my plans of becoming a specialist in marketing field. It is my dream and desire to be admitted in *** and pursue my *** studies in the field of Marketing.

My educational background is in the principles and practices of the marketing field. I have successfully completed a three-year BBA (Hons)-IT program in 2004. My studies have guided me through systematic researching, analytical thinking, management of resources and information evaluation. I continued my studies and completed an MBA with specialization in marketing field in December 2005. Marketing Management, Advertising, Sales Management, Services Marketing, Business Strategy and Leadership were among my favourite subjects of the MBA program.

I love to play computer strategic games, Chess game I mostly play with my compute which I never won, Graphics, Animations, Web Designing, Reading something interesting online, cooking, outing, meeting just everyone in a group and selecting good people as my close friends are my hobbies. I feel no shame in meeting new people, talking them, and playing jokes.

After my studies, I plan to start my career at an international level, In June 2006, I was employed as an Operations Supervisor for a large retailing firm in Saudi Arabia. This was a valuable experience in supermarket management, with thousands of products and stiff competition among different brands and huge variety of products. Such an experience I was unable to get in my country.
During this contract, I have been analysing the top five brands of various product categories. For example, in the 'fresh milk & juices' category in Saudi Arabia, the key brands are Almarai, Nadec, Nada, and Safi. I have compiled weekly/monthly sales figures and attempted to determine why Almarai is the top seller. It appears that Alamarai management focuses on high quality product, packaging design, promotion (renting 60% of the category shelf space), advertising, efficient daily delivery, and a huge network of branches throughout Saudi Arabia.
My two-year contract of two years is going to will soon expire and I have now already been offered a Store Manager position for next contract, but I have a strong ambition in myself to further study to become a marketing specialist, and I cannot become a specialist without having a full understanding of a specific marketing field in Marketing.

Education from *** is affordable for me as compared to other *** countries. *** is a good safer place for other nations. *** is in between the best universities in *** and secondly ***University has a course offer (***) which relates to my goals. That’s why it is number one in my selection criteria.

Obtaining a one-year master's degree from *** means becoming a specialist (or a step towards it). I can put a high price for my services. I will achieve my first objective of ‘Financial Growth’ I will be differentiated from my competitors by having Masters from *** University. I have already met people from many nations in Saudi Arabia, and I will further learn from others while living in a new culture. I will make new friends from Europe, will learn their life style, achieving my second objective of personal growth, and when I will complete my master's degree I will already achieve my third objective of professional growth. The programme will equip me with the necessary skills to continue to acquire new knowledge and understanding throughout my entire working life.
I hope that the combination of my past experiences and academic education will qualify me as a University of *** master's programme candidate.
Thankyou very much Mister Micawber! The revised letter is as following after your suggested changes. and few additions from myside. I applied for three diffenent Master programs. International Marketing, Leadership Management and Entrepreneurship & Innovation. Some Paras need to be customised seperately for each program........

I am waiting for your last OK signal! to pass ot on....

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Program Code: MKT2345

February 2, 2008

Dear Sir/Madam:

I am writing to apply for the Master’s Programme in ***.

My educational background is in the principles and practices of marketing (Management for other programs). I completed a three-year BBA (Hons)-IT program in 2004. My studies have guided me through systematic researching, analytical thinking, management of resources and information evaluation. I continued my studies and completed an MBA with specialization in marketing in December 2005. Marketing Management, Advertising, Sales Management, Services Marketing, Business Strategy & Leadership Management and Entrepreneurship were among my favourite subjects of the MBA program

(I wana say after my mba, my plan was to go international thats why i used PLANNED) After completing my MBA, as part of my plan I started my career at an international level. In June 2006, I was employed as an Operations Supervisor for a large retailing firm in . This was a valuable experience in supermarket to lead a multinational team to plan & manage the availibility of thousands of brands with strong suppliers network & demanding internatonal customers.(customers from all over the world during Hajj season in Makkah) (Please make this a sensible sentence to fit here...)


Beside Daily Supermarket Operations, I have also been analysing the Leading Brands. For example, in the 'Fresh Dairy in Saudi Arabia, the key brands are Almarai, Nadec, Nada, and Alsafi Danone. I have compiled a monthly sales figures and attempted to determine why Almarai is the top selling brand? It appears that The analysis shows that Alamarai management focuses on high quality product, packaging design, promotions (renting 60% of the category shelf space) and advertising. The company uses strategy of market penetration to beat the competition. Promotion emphasises brand strengths across segments and an intensive distribution network is maintained locally.

My two-year contract will soon expire and I have now been offered a Store Manager position, but I have a strong ambition to become a marketing/management specialist, and I cannot become a specialist without having a full understanding of a specific marketing/management field.

Obtaining a one-year master's degree from *** means becoming a specialist (or a step towards it). I have already met people from many nations in , and I will further learn from others while living in a new culture. I will make new friends from , will learn their life style, achieving my objective of personal growth, and when I complete my master's degree I will achieve my objective of professional growth. The programme will equip me with the necessary skills to continue to acquire new knowledge and understanding throughout my entire working life.

I hope that the combination of my past experiences and academic education will qualify me as a University of *** master's programme candidate.
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I have reviewed your letter again, with suggested changes in bold. I cannot follow all your colours and interjections, so I have merely amended as I think best (and some of them are improvements on my own previous suggestions):

Program Code: MKT2345

February 2, 2008

Dear Sir/Madam:

I am writing to apply for your Master’s Programme in ***.

My educational background is in the principles and practices of marketing management. I completed a three-year BBA (Honours) IT program in 2004. My studies have guided me through systematic research, analytical thinking, management of resources and information evaluation. I completed my MBA with specialization in marketing in December 2005. Marketing Management, Advertising, Sales Management, Services Marketing, Business Strategy & Leadership Management and Entrepreneurship were among my favourite subjects within the MBA program

After completing my MBA, I started my career at an international level. In June 2006, I was employed as an Operations Supervisor for a large supermarket chain in Saudi Arabia. This was valuable experience in leading a multinational team to plan and manage the availability of thousands of brands with complex supplier networks and demanding international customers.

In addition to daily supermarket operations, I have also been analysing leading brands. For example, the key Saudi fresh dairy product brands are Almarai, Nadec, Nada, and Alsafi Danone. I have been compiling monthly sales figures and attempting to determine why Almarai is the top selling brand. My analysis shows that Alamarai management focuses on high quality product, packaging design, promotions (renting 60% of the category shelf space) and advertising. The company uses a strategy of market penetration to beat the competition; promotion emphasises brand strengths across segments and an intensive distribution network is maintained locally.
My two-year contract will soon terminate and I have now been offered a Store Manager position, but I have a strong ambition to become a marketing/management specialist, which I cannot do without a fuller understanding of a specific marketing/management field. Obtaining a one-year master's degree from *** means becoming a specialist or advancing a step towards that goal.
I have already met people from many nations in Saudi Arabia, and I will further learn from others while living in a new culture. I will make new friends from Europe, will learn their life styles, achieving my objective of personal growth, and when I complete my master's degree I will achieve my objective of professional growth. Your programme will equip me with the necessary skills to continue to acquire new knowledge and understanding throughout my career.

I hope that the combination of my past experiences and academic education will qualify me as a University of *** master's programme candidate.

(Don't EVER use an ampersand in a formal letter unless it is part of a book/course/etc title!)
MISTER MICAWBER!

I don't have the words to say you Thanks.... As the words and few sentences are not enough for the great work.

Let me say "Mr. Mecawber! THANK YOU VERY MUCH" for all your efforts for the letter.

My prays will be with you in all the times.

REGARDS, [A]

AAMIR
MISTER MECAWBER!

Emotion: big smile I don't have the words to say yourThanks.... As the words and few sentences are not enough for it.

Let me say "THANK YOU VERY MUCH" for all your efforts for the letter.

My prays will be with you in all the times.

REGARDS

AAMIR

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My pleasure, Aamir. Good luck with your application and in your career.
The admission will be announced on 17 April 2008. I will inform you of the results.

I wish if i can come and visit the forum and help others if I can!

I am busy in opening a new superstore in Madina and next Hypermaket is on the schedule..... any way i will try my best to be part of the forum.

Regards