Dear xxx,

Attached please find our initial proposal for the mentioned project. But I am not sure would it be workable now. Snice we lunched a similar class type from Nov last year. The classes are xxx and xxx training. But only a few applications have been received (30 pax for 5 lessons) and only 3 applications are received in Jan. In fact, besides of the previous mentioned problem, I still have the following concerns:

1. Venue - Enrolling the course by individully is expected more than company. Therefore, evening class would be more appropriate. However, our training centre is not good enough to conduct evening classes. We should rent a training room with PC facilities from outside. The rental fee for a room with PC is much expensive than a normal classroom and room charges for evening class also higher than daytime around 20% or more as well as tightening booking schedule.

2. Recongintion - In order to increase the demand for the course, to gain a common reconginition is very important. However, lack of marketing promotional investment it could be very difficult to do so.

3. Distinguish with our normal attendence Cert. - As we will issue the certificate using the same letter head paper as our normal class. Be honest, it could not be a very good selling point.

These are my personal opinions only, I believe top management will make the right decision after consideration.

Regards,

May
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Attached please find our initial proposal for the project. However, I am not sure would it be workable now. We launched a similar class in November last year with *** and *** training. Unfortunatley only a few applications have been received (30 pax for 5 lessons) and only 3 applications have been received in January. Besides my concern about the popularity of such a course, I am am also concerned about:

1. Venue - We expect more enrollment by individuals than companies. Therefore, evening classes would be more appropriate. However, our training centre is not appropriate for this. We would need to rent an external training room with PC facilities. The rental fee for a room with PCs is much more expensive than a normal classroom and room charges are around 20% higher in the evenings.

2. Recognition - It is important to gain (a common reconginition - not sure what you mean by this) in order to increase the demand for the course. However, the lack of marketing promotional investment could make this difficult.

3. Certification: We will be issuing a standard certificate using the same letter head paper as our normal class. This is not a very good selling point.

These are my personal opinions only, I believe the top management will make the right decision after consideration.

Regards,

May
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