Explain the reasons why you have chosen your particular programme of study and how this knowledge will enable you to serve yourself and the community. (500 words)

To be a business woman has long been my dream. It not only helps me to develop a logical and analytical mind, but also enrich my knowledge. This knowledge also enable me to serve myself and the community. So I have chosen Marketing for my major.

Learning the development of practical skills and academic and professional knowledge is one of the reasons why I have chosen Marketing programme. It has a strong emphasis on interactive and student-centred learning methods. It also provides a comprehensive business education, which has attracted me to put it as my first choice.

Besides, I have the chance to visit companies overseas and companies in the mainland to conduct project work and to present our findings at the annual marketing symposium. I can also spend a semester studying in another university overseas or in the mainland. It is a good chance to step beyond and experience other countries’life and culture.

After completing this programme, I can learn a lot of skills such as communication and oratorical skill. This knowledge can significantly serve myself. The oratorical skill can enrich my social circle. The analytical skill learn from the programme also enable me to train my thought, which can develop my logical and analytical mind. These skills will greatly affect my interpersonal relationship and my career in the future.



In addition, this knowledge can help me serve the community. I will apply the critical thinking learn from the programme to solve real and practical business problems in the marketing world. The analytical and communication skills also enable me to face the challenge and serve in an increasingly complex business environment. Furthermore, I hope I can play a part in using the key business knowledge and skills to deal confidently with broad issues in a global business environment. Even if I do not pursue in marketing at last, I will try my best to put into practice what has been learned.

In conclusion, the programme I have chosen of study realize my goal. I will try my best to fulfill my dream to be a successful business woman. After graduation, I will also endeavor to serve the community and contribute business world.
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To be a business woman has long been my dream. It (Do not use pronoun here) not only helps me to develop a logical and analytical mind, but also enrich my knowledge. This knowledge also enable (verb agreement) me to serve myself and (too self-serving) the community. So I have chosen Marketing for my major.

Learning the development of practical skills and academic and professional knowledge is one of the reasons why I have chosen (article) Marketing programme. It has a strong emphasis on interactive and student-centred learning methods. It also provides a comprehensive business education, which has attracted (wording) me to put it as my first choice.

Besides, I have the (You haven't got the chance yet) chance to visit (wording) companies overseas and companies in the mainland to conduct project work and to present our findings at the annual marketing symposium. I can also spend a semester studying in another university overseas or in the mainland. It is a good chance (wording) to step beyond (wording) and experience other countries’life and culture.

After completing this programme, I can learn a lot of skills such as communication (adj. here) and oratorical skill. This knowledge can significantly serve (wording) myself. The oratorical skill can enrich my social circle (not really). The analytical skill learn (verb form) from the programme also enable_ (singular) me to train (wording) my thought, and develop my logical and analytical mind. These skills will greatly affect my interpersonal relationship and my career in the future.



In addition, this knowledge can help me serve the community. I will apply the critical thinking learn (same here) from the programme to solve real and practical business problems in the marketing world. The analytical and communication skills also enable me to face the challenge and serve in an increasingly complex business environment. Furthermore, I hope I can play a part in using the key business knowledge and skills to deal confidently with broad issues in a global business environment. Even if I do not pursue in marketing in the future, I will try my best to put into practice what has been learned.

In conclusion, the programme I have chosen of study helps realize my goal. I will try my best to fulfill my dream to be a successful business woman. After graduation, I will also endeavor to serve the community and contribute _ _ (preposition) business world.
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