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20. Critically analyze your country’s approach to SDGs (Sustainable Development Goals) in 800-1000 words (total).


SDGs has a very crucial role in our society not only locally also globally, where big responsibility has on people, governments, businesses and research and academy. Sustainability has many meanings and has relation with global commons, where it is abused and overused over the years.

Considering many points on Sustainable development it covers a very broad range of topics such as cultures, nations, cities, environment, and education. (UN, 2018)

As a young, developing country ... has been dramatically changing towards Sustainability. According to the UN, in October 2018 the Government of ... adopted the resolution “On measures the implement the National Goals and Targets in the Field of Sustainability Development for the Period Until 2030.” (UNDP, 2018).

In 2017 the Delegation of the European Union to ... offered a new project regarding the sustainability in ... Universities. (EEAS, January 2017). The main purpose of the project was to make green ... universities by involving to special training by European experts to teachers and students in order to accept the environment-friendly approach through reducing of water, electricity, paper and other resources consumption and waste management.

... participated in the event, which should provide an opportunity to discuss issues relating to the need to develop democracy in the period up to 2030, in about the specific features of Goal 16 - "Peace, Justice, and Effective Institutions ”and Goals 3 -“ Good Health and Well-Being.” (UN, Int February 2018)


I think if powerful and prestigious universities of ... will take apart and play an important role in spreading sustainability, If they can develop and apply a program of this nature they will carry very powerful message today and for tomorrow.

I would like to learn more about Sustainability and one of the bright examples I think it is Japan. Japan is a society with rich in culture and with high values in the way Japanese people live their lives, and how big respect towards nature and not matter as small island nation, Japan has so much greenery where is respected and preserved. Japanese people have a lot of wisdom and vision of the future, I am sure I can deeply understand and learn more about sustainability in Japanese interest and apply to my own country as well. ... needs to understand that it is extremely important for us that development has to be sustainable because otherwise, we will run to the situation where natural resources in our planet will be degraded to such an extent where development and economic growth will not be able to continue its growth at the same level.

Every section of society has to understand or have a whole idea of sustainability. The Element of since is important in case how we define sustainability. The sustainability is not based only on philosophy or on very broad principles, it has to be just at least some degree of efficiency and care not only in developed countries, however, but it is also important among developing countries as well.

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I've just looked at your introduction. Here are some comments.


SDGs has have/play a very crucial role in our society

not only locally but also globally,<<< what do you mean?

where big responsibility has<<<< no, don't say responsibility has someone, , say someone has responsibility

on people, governments, businesses and researchers and academics. Sustainability has many meanings <<< which ones are you going to consider?

and has relation with global commons, <<<<, what are 'global commons'?

where it is abused and overused over the years. <<< wrong tense

You need to definine an SDG.


In very broad terms, your introduction should include a thesis statement to indicate your overall position, and a brief outline of the main points your essay will consider. You haven't really done this.

For details about introductions, have a look at this University of Toronto site,

https://advice.writing.utoronto.ca/planning/intros-and-conclusions/


Clive

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20. Critically analyze your country’s approach to SDGs (Sustainable Development Goals) in 800-1000 words (total).

Your essay lacks organization. There is no thesis statement and no clear conclusion. I cannot follow the argument points. There are no transitions from one idea to the next.


SDGs (see other comments) has a very crucial role in our society not only locally also globally, where big responsibility has on people, governments, businesses and research and academy. Sustainability has many meanings and has relation with global commons, where it is abused and overused over the years. (I don't understand this sentence at all.)

Considering many points on Sustainable development (Dangling modifier) it covers a very broad range of topics such as cultures, nations, cities, environment, and education. (UN, 2018)

As a young, developing country ... has been dramatically changing towards Sustainability. According to the UN, in October 2018 the Government of ... adopted the resolution “On measures the implement the National Goals and Targets in the Field of Sustainability Development for the Period Until 2030.” (UNDP, 2018).

In 2017 the Delegation of the European Union to ... offered a new project regarding the sustainability in ... Universities. (EEAS, January 2017). The main purpose of the project was to make green ... universities by involving to special training by European experts to teachers and students in order to accept the environment-friendly approach through reducing consumption of water, electricity, paper and other resources consumption and waste management.

.??.. participated in the event, which should provide an opportunity to discuss issues relating to the need to develop democracy in the period up to 2030, in about the specific features of Goal 16 - "Peace, Justice, and Effective Institutions ”and Goals 3 -“ Good Health and Well-Being.” (UN, Int February 2018)


I think if powerful and prestigious universities of ... will take apart and play an important role in spreading sustainability, If they can develop and apply a program of this nature they will carry very powerful message today and for tomorrow.

I would like to learn more about Sustainability and one of the bright examples I think it is Japan. Japan is a society with rich in culture and with high values in the way Japanese people live their lives, and how big respect towards nature and not matter as small island nation, Japan has so much greenery where is respected and preserved. Japanese people have a lot of wisdom and vision of the future, ( comma splice) I am sure I can deeply understand and learn more about sustainability in Japanese interest and apply (missing pronoun) to my own country as well. ... needs to understand that it is extremely important for us that development has to be sustainable because otherwise, we will run to the situation where natural resources in our planet will be degraded to such an extent where development and economic growth will not be able to continue its growth at the same level.

Every section of society has to understand or have a whole idea of sustainability. The Element of since is important in case how we define sustainability. The sustainability is not based only on philosophy or on very broad principles, it has to be just at least some degree of efficiency and care not only in developed countries, however, but it is also important among developing countries as well.

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Sanam Pasilova 2468SDGs has a very crucial role

1) Do not start with an abbreviation. 2) Plural verb needed.

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content = +a+crucial+role&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C%2A%20a%20crucial%20role%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bplay%20a%20crucial%20role%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bplayed%20a%20crucial%20role%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bplays%20a%20crucial%20role%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhave%20a%20crucial%20role%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhas%20a%20crucial%20role%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bplaying%20a%20crucial%20role%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsuch%20a%20crucial%20role%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhad%20a%20crucial%20role%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bassigned%20a%20crucial%20role%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bis%20a%20crucial%20role%3B%2Cc0

Sanam Pasilova 2468where big responsibility has on people

which places a huge responsibility on ...


https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content = +a+heavy+responsibility%2C+a+huge+responsibility%2C&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C%2A%20a%20heavy%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bbear%20a%20heavy%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bis%20a%20heavy%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bbears%20a%20heavy%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhave%20a%20heavy%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bplaces%20a%20heavy%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bwas%20a%20heavy%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsuch%20a%20heavy%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhas%20a%20heavy%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bbore%20a%20heavy%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcarry%20a%20heavy%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B.t2%3B%2C%2A%20a%20huge%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bis%20a%20huge%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bwas%20a%20huge%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhave%20a%20huge%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsuch%20a%20huge%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3B%27s%20a%20huge%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhas%20a%20huge%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhad%20a%20huge%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bplaces%20a%20huge%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bfelt%20a%20huge%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bon%20a%20huge%20responsibility%3B%2Cc0

Sanam Pasilova 2468has relation with

is related to

Sanam Pasilova 2468global commons

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content = +global+commons&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C%2A%20global%20commons%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bthe%20global%20commons%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Ba%20global%20commons%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bof%20global%20commons%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Band%20global%20commons%3B%2Cc0%3B%3BThe%20global%20commons%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bto%20global%20commons%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bas%20global%20commons%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bour%20global%20commons%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bother%20global%20commons%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bon%20global%20commons%3B%2Cc0

Sanam Pasilova 2468where it is abused

Do you mean the term "global commons" or do you mean that they (the global commons) have been abused?

Sanam Pasilova 2468overused

over-exploited?

I'm afraid that is all I have time for right now.

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Thank you so much, very helpful. Can I send you another question please? I have to submit it tonight.

24. Literature Review (Please provide an academic background to the research that you are proposing. Please critically analyze the relationship among different works on your topic and show how they relate to your proposed research).


It is often said that the main wealth of the country is its population, whose work ensures the well-being of residents, their children, and grandchildren. Since the money of the country comes from the taxes of its citizens. Therefore, the next generation of the working class is our children. We always say, “Children are the next leader of our country”. Through this, we must keep our children in good health and strong mind.

Malnutrition and unhealthy lifestyle is a global problem that comes in different forms. Affecting all age groups, all sexes, wealthy and poor people at some point in their lifecycle, from early childhood to old age (Unicef, 2017). All children have the right to life and right to have health, which means access to information services to clean water, food and proper sanitation. Children need to live in a safe environment, free from violence, girls and boys should have access to education. (Unicef, 2018).

Evidence suggests that the origins of obesity and non-communicable diseases, such as cardiovascular heart disease and diabetes may also lie in early childhood. World trends indicate an increase in the prevalence of obesity in almost every country. Some argue that obesity is the result of a complex combination of genetics, family education, psychological variables and a variety of external factors that affect nutrition and physical activity. (Choquet, Meyre, 2011). However, it is unlikely that a rapid increase in the prevalence of obesity in children can be associated with genetic changes. In addition, it should not disregard people's personal responsibility for their own health. It is very important to determine the factors that make overeating and passivity so widespread. In this regard, a special concern is a market for high-calorie food and beverages, especially for children.

In the case of Uzbekistan, I will do research on improving children’s nutrition through education targeting age from 7 to 12 years old in Uzbek schools. I will provide solutions in order to improve their knowledge about nutrition and health behaviors at schools through education. So they have an equal opportunity to learn and become skilled in order to participate in developing the economy.

Thank very much! I will be working on it.