Hi everyone , this is my first post here. I have to write a small composition between 300-400 words on topic “health is more important than wealth . Discuss” . Hope you’ll spend a little time to read and post some comments.

Best regards,

Health is more important than wealth. Let consider, health is the necessary condition while wealth is the sufficient condition. We need both of them , in order to live happily . Bus as you can see, the necessary condition is always more important.

A certain fact is that we can’t buy health with money. Today, there are still some deseases which have no cure . wealth doesn’t always make life more healthy and happily . If you are a billionair, you always fell unsafe . Afraid of being killed of kinapped for your fortune will speedily harm your health and shorten your longevity.

Further more , without being fit , how can you enjoy your wealth . If a man have wealth , he can have every thing . As an old saying : “Where there is health , there is life “ That’s why health is more important than wealth.

The statistics are clear that people are healthly live longer amd more happily than rich ones. Rich people are taken effect by money pressure, it make their life uncomfortable when always have to think about money and how to make money. Today, many young people spent almost all their time to earn as much money as possible. They don’t care about themselves because they think money can keep them healthy . This is completely erroneous , many people earn like mad until they have stress, and waste money on treatment. They have forgotten that after they die , they will leave everything behind.

From my view point, I would like to be healthy instead of wealthy. I can do anything include becoming rich but I can’t just work hard , drop my health and live the rest of my life in bed . It’s good to live healthy and remember : “Keep the green mountain , and there is a plenty of wood”.

P.S Are my ideas enough ? I would like to make it a bit longer .
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Hello, FfF, and welcome to English Forums.

I think the content of your essay is basically good. If you want to add more, the first thing to do would be to find a specific reference for your comment, 'The statistics are clear.' If you can supply a specific reference for these statistics, it would make your essay more concrete. You might also give a brief explanation of necessary vs sufficient for the reader who is unaware of this logico-philosophical dichotomy.

On the other hand, you have a lot of little grammar/spelling/structure errors, and you need to review and correct your essay carefully. Here are the first paragraphs fixed:

Health is more important than wealth. Health is the necessary condition while wealth is the sufficient condition. We need both of them, in order to live happily, but the necessary condition is always more important.

We cannot buy health with money. Today, there are still diseases which have no cure. Wealth does not always make life more healthy and happy . Billionaires feel unsafe: afraid of being killed or kidnapped for their fortune will speedily harm their health and shorten their longevity.
Thank you Mister Micawber , for your helpful comments.

Sorry about the idea "the statistic is clear..." . I read it in a newspaper and now i'm addicted to use it Emotion: stick out tongue

Anyway, this is my edition, hope you will take a look .

Health is more important than wealth. Health is the necessary condition while wealth is the sufficient condition. We need both of them , in order to live happily . Bus as you can will see below, the necessary condition is always more important.

According to the first paragraph , health is the necessary condition. That mean you can’t get what you want unless you are healthy . This is the most important factor.

Wealth is just a sufficient condition , as there are many way to be successful not only being wealthy . You can become a famous singer or a well-known artist of professor without having a lot of money . All you need is wealth . On the other hand we can’t buy health with money. Today, there are still some diseases which have no cure . wealth doesn’t always make life more healthy and happily . If you are a billionaire, you always fell unsafe . Afraid of being killed of kidnapped for your fortune will speedily harm their health and shorten their longevity. Further more , without being fit , how can you enjoy your wealth . If a man has wealth , he can have every thing . As an old saying : “Where there is health , there is life “ That’s why health is more important than wealth.

The statistics are clear that people are healthy live longer add more happily than most of rich people . The majority of rich people are taken effect by money pressure, it makes their life uncomfortable because they always have to think about money ,how to produce money and protect their money , either. Today, many young people spent almost all their time to earn as much money as possible. They don’t care about themselves because they think money can keep them healthy . This is completely erroneous , many people earn like mad until they have stress, and waste money on treatment. They have forgotten that after they die , they will leave everything behind.

From my view point, I would like to be healthy instead of wealthy. I can do anything include becoming rich but I can’t just work hard , drop my health and live the rest of my life in bed . It’s good to live healthy and remember : “Keep the green mountain , and there is a plenty of wood”.
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It still needs work-- or at least, proofreading. I have emboldened problem areas below:

Health is more important than wealth. Health is the necessary condition while wealth is the sufficient condition. We need both of them , in order to live happily . Bus as you can will see below, the necessary condition is always more important.
According to the first paragraph , health is the necessary condition. That mean you can’t get what you want unless you are healthy . This is the most important factor.

Wealth is just a sufficient condition , as there are many way to be successful not only being wealthy . You can become a famous singer or a well-known artist of professor without having a lot of money . All you need is wealth . On the other hand we can’t buy health with money. Today, there are still some diseases which have no cure . wealth doesn’t always make life more healthy and happily . If you are a billionaire, you always fell unsafe . Afraid of being killed of kidnapped for your fortune will speedily harm their health and shorten their longevity. Further more , without being fit , how can you enjoy your wealth . If a man has wealth , he can have every thing . As an old saying : “Where there is health , there is life “ That’s why health is more important than wealth.

The statistics are clear that people are healthy live longer add more happily than most of rich people . The majority of rich people are taken effect by money pressure, it makes their life uncomfortable because they always have to think about money ,how to produce money and protect their money , either. Today, many young people spent almost all their time to earn as much money as possible. They don’t care about themselves because they think money can keep them healthy . This is completely erroneous , many people earn like mad until they have stress, and waste money on treatment. They have forgotten that after they die , they will leave everything behind.

From my view point, I would like to be healthy instead of wealthy. I can do anything include becoming rich but I can’t just work hard , drop my health and live the rest of my life in bed . It’s good to live healthy and remember : “Keep the green mountain , and there is a plenty of wood”.

I have no idea what the ending proverb means.
Thank you somuch , Mister Micawber
hey hope ur fine... i just want to tel u that ur assay is not bad at all. i was actually searching for this topic : they say health is more important than health . do u agree with this say or not?
when i suddenly found u after taking loads of note.
so i think i should thank u alot bcz i was having a problem finding arguments and u helped me with it.
thank u a lot keep in touch maybe i can help u one day . kisses take care
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hey i tried to coerrect ur essay alittle here it goes: i found the second supporting paragraph a little bit weird Emotion: tongue tied if u could explain it to me evethoug i tried to correct it or maybe to change ideas plus the second is not that long Emotion: tongue tied maybe its because there is not to much idea for that subject. anyway we have a little the same way of writing of u could contact me on :[email address deleted--MM] my name is natalie and am 16 yrs old am lebanese Emotion: big smile Health is more important than wealth. Let's consider, health is the necessary condition while wealth is the sufficient condition. We need both of them , in order to live happily . But as you can see, the necessary condition is always more important. A certain fact is that we can’t buy health with money. Today, there are still some deseases which have no cure . wealth doesn’t always make life more healthy and happily . If you are a billionair, you always feel unsafe . Afraid of being killed ,and kinapped for your fortune; will speedily harm your health and shorten your longevity. Further more , without being fit , how can you enjoy your wealth ? If a man have health , he can have everything . As an old saying : “Where there is health , there is life “ That’s why health is more important than wealth. The statistics are clear that healthy people live longer and more happily than rich ones. Rich people are taken effect by money pressure, it makes their life uncomfortable when they always have to think about money and how to make money. Today, many young people spend almost all their time earning as much money as possible. They don’t care about themselves because they think money can keep them healthy . This is completely erroneous , many people earn like mad until they have stress, and waste money on treatments. They have forgotten that after they die , they will leave everything behind. From my view point, I would like to be healthy instead of wealthy. I can do anything include becoming rich but I can’t just work hard , drop my health and live the rest of my life in bed . It’s good to live healthy and remember : “Keep the green mountain , and there is a plenty of wood”.
your point is good as well.Thanks for your points.
good sir,you are description is good
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