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Our world has experienced 3 revolutions, they are the revolution of using water and steam energy to mechanize production; the revolution of using electrical energy to create large-scale production; the revolution of using electronic and information technology to automate the production and now we are witnessing the development of the fourth industrial revolution. That is the revolution is based on the highly integrated foundation of the system connection the Chemistry-Physics-biology and represents high-technology applications, network internet of things, artificial intelligence. With the pace of development as rapidly in the era of the industrial revolution 4.0, it is not difficult to give a lot of theories to the question of how the world will be like in the year 2030. In my opinion, the world in 2060 will be a flat world, a world will not have the distance of science, engineering, technology, civilization; location!

Because the wave of the influence of the industrial revolution 4.0 has taken place in all countries that will make the world in 2030 some following significant chances. First of all, globalization has become faster and stronger. Thus, this process has a huge impact on the relationship between nations and makes the borders between countries narrow. Moreover, human is able to get in touch easily with millions people at once, even outside the earth. Thanks to this, poor countries can take advantage of the human’s achievements of science and technology to serve for their countries. For example, poor nations in Africa can apply Israel technology in the production of clean agriculture, organic agriculture.

Secondly, online shopping will continue to grow, leading to the closure of many detail business. Some boutique shopping centres are likely to survive, particularly those business that innovate to enhance the shopping experience in their physical stores. Thirdly, healthcare devices are likely to become more digital and multi-functional. For instance, body scanners will be used more frequently to automate health assessments and provide detailed information to our healthcare professionals. Healthcare treatments are more likely to be targeting cells at the DNA level with less reliance on surgical options or chemical treatments opening up all sorts of new possibilities for treatments cures and even reveal of cellular damage. Forty, many people want to go to space. If the cost of achieving orbit can be bought down by new technology , it is likely that space travel will become more common place, not just for trained astronauts or the super rich. Space station and space hotels would proliferate and maybe even commuter travel will be introduced between Earth, the moon and Mars. Fifth, it is almost certain that artificial intelligence will outstrip human in quantitative functions. Computer power will increase. The cost of computer and chips will be cheaper. Therefore, the development of smart technology is probably the direction that humanity pursues. Last but not least, tidal station is supplying most of the power for seaboard cities. On the interior of the continent, there are still some nuclear plants. But, most have been replaced by new types of power plants that simply harness the heart from the planet itself and it gets really hot, really hot. However, a lot of power from steam can be generated quickly.

The world's flat in 2030 is back to human life considerable advances and comfort. However, the challenge that it poses also is not so small that the scientists have a headache and give a warning as the natural resource will be exploited. In addition, the habitat is contaminated, the global warming leads to climate change and terrible natural disasters such as storm, drought, tsunami and tornado. Moreover, the ozone layer is at risk of perforation. Not only that, the Civil War between religions, the nation and the destruction of the biotech wars are fraught with danger – all of which will be destroyed only with the button pressed.

In short, science, technology is growing in strength and we are driven to a world of modernity, creation and perfection in 2030 but besides a lot of risk and challenges that are in front. Therefore, each person has a share of our strength to protect the green environment for our common home.

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Our world has experienced three revolutions, they are the revolution of using water and steam energy to mechanize production; the revolution of using electrical energy to create large-scale production; the revolution of using electronic and information technology to automate the production and now we are witnessing the development of the fourth industrial revolution. That is the revolution is based on the highly integrated foundation of the system connects the Chemistry-Physics-biology and represents high-technology applications, network internet of things, artificial intelligence. With the pace of development as rapidly in the era of the industrial revolution 4.0, it is not difficult to give a lot of theories to the question of how the world will be like in the year 2060. In my opinion, the world in 2060 will be a flat world, a world will not have the distance of science, engineering, technology, civilization; location!

Because the wave of the influence of the industrial revolution 4.0 has taken place in all countries that will make the world in 2060 some following significant changes. First of all, globalization has become faster and stronger. Thus, this process has a huge impact on the relationship between nations and makes the borders between countries narrow. Moreover, the human is able to get in touch easily with millions of people at once, even outside the earth. Thanks to this, poor countries can take advantage of the human’s achievements of science and technology to serve for their countries. For example, poor nations in Africa can apply Israel technology in the production of clean agriculture, organic agriculture.

Secondly, online shopping will continue to grow, leading to the closure of many detail business. Some boutique shopping centers are likely to survive, particularly those business that innovates to enhance the shopping experience in their physical stores. Thirdly, healthcare devices are likely to become more digital and multi-functional. For instance, body scanners will be used more frequently to automate health assessments and provide detailed information to our healthcare professionals. Healthcare treatments are more likely to be targeting cells at the DNA level with less reliance on surgical options or chemical treatments opening up all sorts of new possibilities for treatments cures and even reveal of cellular damage. Forty, many people want to go to space. If the cost of achieving orbit can be bought down by new technology, it is likely that space travel will become a more commonplace, not just for trained astronauts or the super-rich. Space station and space hotels would proliferate and maybe even commuter travel will be introduced between Earth, the moon and Mars. Fifth, it is almost certain that artificial intelligence will outstrip human in quantitative functions. Computer power will increase. The cost of the computer and chips will be cheaper. Therefore, the development of smart technology is probably the direction that humanity pursues. Last but not least, the tidal station is supplying most of the power for seaboard cities. On the interior of the continent, there are still some nuclear plants. But, most have been replaced by new types of power plants that simply harness the heart from the planet itself and it gets really hot, really hot. However, a lot of power from steam can be generated quickly.

The world's flat in 2060 is back to human life considerable advances and comfort. However, the challenge that it poses also is not so small that the scientists have a headache and give a warning as the natural resource will be exploited. In addition, the habitat is contaminated, the global warming leads to climate change and terrible natural disasters such as storm, drought, tsunami and tornado. Moreover, the ozone layer is at risk of perforation. Not only that, the Civil War between religions, the nation and the destruction of the biotech wars are fraught with danger – all of which will be destroyed only with the button pressed.

In short, science, technology is growing in strength and we are driven to a world of modernity, creation and perfection in 2060 but besides a lot of risk and challenges that are in front. Therefore, each person has a share of our strength to protect the green environment for our common home.

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Our world has experienced three revolutions, (comma splice error) they are the revolution of using water and steam energy to mechanize production; the revolution of using electrical energy to create large-scale production; the revolution of using electronics and information technology to automate the production and now we are witnessing the development of the fourth industrial revolution. That is the revolution is based (ungrammatical. A main cause does not have two verbs like that. ) on the highly integrated foundation of the system connects (ungrammatical) the Chemistry-Physics-biology and represents high-technology applications, network internet (??) of things, (missing word) artificial intelligence. (The last sentence is completely incomprehensible. The phrases are techno-babble, and not good understandable English.)

With the pace of development as rapidly (When you use "as" + adverb, you need another "as". e.g. As rapidly as the world is warming, the average sea level will be higher by 3 meters by 2040.) in the era of the industrial revolution 4.0, it is not difficult to give a lot of theories to the question of how the world will be like in the year 2060. (Your title said 2030, not 2060. Which one is it?) In my opinion, the world in 2060 will be a flat world, (The world is not flat, and no astronomical event will flatten it! "Flat" is the wrong word. If you are using it allegorically, you must explain what you mean. ) a world will not have the distance of science, engineering, technology, civilization; location! (That statement makes no sense at all, and the punctuation is wrong. "Science" and "distance" do not collocate. )


Because the wave of the influence of the industrial revolution 4.0 has taken place (This does not make sense. You need to write in clear language. ) in all countries that will make the world in 2060 some following significant changes. (ungrammatical) First of all, globalization has become completely changed the normal way of doing business. faster and stronger. Thus, this process has a huge impact on the relationship between nations and makes the borders between countries narrow. (wrong word) Moreover, the human (wrong word) is able to get in touch easily with millions of people at once, (With a million conversations going on at once, no one will be able to think.) even outside the earth. Thanks to this, poor countries can take advantage of the human’s (Which human?) achievements of science and technology to serve for their countries. For example, poor nations in Africa can apply Israel (wrong form) technology in the production of clean agriculture, organic agriculture. (wrong phrases, no conjunction. Do you mean large-scale hydroponic gardening? We do not produce agriculture. We produce food. )


Secondly, Second, (Use first, second, third, and fourth for enumerations.) online shopping will continue to grow, leading to the closure of many detail (wrong word) business. Some boutique shopping centers are likely to survive, particularly those business that innovates to enhance the shopping experience in their physical stores. Thirdly, healthcare devices (medical instruments / devices) are likely to become more digital and multi-functional. For instance, body scanners will be used more frequently to automate health assessments and provide detailed information to our healthcare professionals. Healthcare treatments are more likely to be targeting cells at the DNA level with less reliance on surgical options or chemical treatments opening up all sorts of new possibilities for treatments cures and even reveal of cellular damage. Forty, many people want to go to space. If the cost of achieving orbit can be bought down by new technology, it is likely that space travel will become a more commonplace, not just for trained astronauts or the super-rich. Space station and space hotels would proliferate and maybe even commuter travel will be introduced between Earth, the moon and Mars. Fifth, it is almost certain that artificial intelligence will outstrip human in quantitative functions. (??) Computer power will increase. The cost of the computer and chips will be cheaper. Therefore, the development of smart technology is probably the direction that humanity pursues. Last but not least, the tidal station (??) is supplying most of the power for seaboard cities. On the interior of the continent, there are still some nuclear plants. But, most have been replaced by new types of power plants that simply harness the heart (??) from the planet itself and it gets really hot, really hot. (Are you talking about global warming?) However, a lot of power from steam can be generated quickly.

Our world has experienced three revolution, they are the revolution of using water and steam energy to mechanize production; the revolution of using electrical energy to create large-scale production; the revolution of using electronic and information technology to automate the production and now we are witnessing the development of the fourth industrial revolution. This revolution is based on the highly integrated foundation between the Chemistry-Physics-biology and represents high-technology applications, internet of things, artificial intelligence. Because of the rapid development in the era of the industrial revolution 4.0, it is not difficult to give a lot of theories to the question of how the world will be like in the year 2030. In my opinion, the world in 2030 will be a high-tech world.

The world will have some considerable changes. First of all, globalization has completely changed the normal way of doing business. Thus, this process has a huge impact on the relationship between nations and makes the borders between countries slight. Moreover, people are able to get in touch easily with millions of people, even outside the earth. Thanks to this, poor countries can take advantage of people’s achievements of science and technology to serve for their countries. For example, poor nations in Africa can apply Israeli technology in the clean agriculture, organic agriculture.

Second, online shopping will continue to grow, leading to the closure of many detail business. Some boutique shopping centers are likely to survive, particularly those business that innovates to enhance the shopping experience in their physical stores. Third, healthcare devices are likely to become more digital and multi-functional. For instance, body scanners will be used more frequently to automate health assessments and provide detailed information to our healthcare professionals. Healthcare treatments are more likely to be targeting cells at the DNA level with less reliance on surgical options or chemical treatments opening up all sorts of new possibilities for treatments cures and even reveal of cellular damage. Fourth, many people want to go to space. If the cost of achieving orbit can be bought down by new technology, it is likely that space travel will become more commonplace, not just for trained astronauts or the super-rich. Space station and space hotels would proliferate and maybe even commuter travel will be introduced between Earth, the moon and Mars. Fifth, it is almost certain that artificial intelligence will outstrip human in every way. Technology is a double-edged sword. Therefore, that is one of the challenges that people have to face. Computer power will increase. The cost of the computer and chips will be cheaper. Therefore, the development of smart technology is probably the direction that humanity pursues. Last but not least, the tidal station is supplying most of the power for seaboard cities. On the interior of the continent, there are still some nuclear plants. But, most have been replaced by new types of power plants that simply harness the heart from the planet itself. However, a lot of power from steam can be generated quickly.

The world's flat in 2030 is back to human life considerable advances and comfort. However, the challenge that it poses also is not so small that the scientists have a headache and give a warning as the natural resource will be exploited. In addition, the habitat is contaminated, the global warming leads to climate change and terrible natural disasters such as storm, drought, tsunami and tornado. Moreover, the ozone layer is at risk of perforation. Not only that, the Civil War between religions, the nation and the destruction of the biotech wars are fraught with danger – all of which will be destroyed only with the button pressed.

In short, science, technology is growing in strength and we are driven to a world of modernity, creation and perfection in 2030 but besides a lot of risk and challenges that are in front. Therefore, each person has a share of our strength to protect the green environment for our common home.

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Our world has experienced three industrial revolutions in manufacturing. (If you just say "revolution" you confuse the reader with the famous revolutions: the Russian Revolution of 1918, the French Revolution of 1789, the American Revolution of 1776, and countless others.)

They are: first, the revolution of using water and steam energy to mechanize production; second, the revolution of using electrical energy to create for large-scale production; third, the revolution of using electronic and information technology to automate the production. Now we are in the midst of witnessing the development of the fourth industrial revolution. This revolution is based on robotics in manufacturing plants which are completely automated with little human intervention. Eventually, the plants and their interconnected global supply chains are controlled and orchestrated by artificial intelligence and genetic algorithms that make critical real-time decisions to optimize production and minimize wastage and cost. the highly integrated foundation between the Chemistry-Physics-biology and represents high-technology applications, internet of things, artificial intelligence. (That crossed-out text is meaningless techno-babble.) Because of the rapid development of these control systems in the era of the industrial revolution 4.0, it is not difficult to predict what give a lot of theories to the question of how the world will be like in the year 2030. In my opinion, the world in 2030 will be a high-tech world. (We are already in a high-tech world. That is not much of a prediction. )

The world will have some considerable changes. First of all, globalization has completely changed the normal way of doing business. Thus, this process has a huge impact on the relationship between nations and makes the borders between countries non-existent, at least from a business (trade and supply chain) perspective. slight. Moreover, people are able to get in touch easily with anyone in the world with millions of people, even those on space stations in earth orbit. outside the earth. Thanks to this, poor countries can take advantage of people’s achievements of science and technology to serve for their countries. For example, poor nations in Africa can apply Israeli technology in the clean agriculture, organic agriculture.

Second, online shopping will continue to grow, leading to the closure of many traditional retail detail businesses. Some boutique shopping centers are likely to survive, particularly those businesses that innovate to enhance the shopping experience in their physical stores. Third, diagnostic and treatment systems in the healthcare industry will become more automated and controlled by sophisticated algorithms. devices are likely to become more digital and multi-functional. For instance, body scanners will be used more frequently to automate health assessments and provide detailed information to our healthcare professionals. Genetic diseases may be cured by repairing defective genes at the DNA level. Viruses will be harnessed to inject toxins directly into targeted cancer cells, killing them and leaving normal cells alone. Surgeons will have robotic assistants, making surgeries, such as the removal of brain tumors and repairing spinal cord injuries, which are impossible today, commonplace. Artificial skin will improve the survival rate of burn victims. Healthcare treatments are more likely to be targeting cells at the DNA level with less reliance on surgical options or chemical treatments opening up all sorts of new possibilities for treatments cures and even reveal of cellular damage.