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Please comment on the following sentence. What's wrong with it?

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Market could anticipate Fed pause with the today data which will help the rebuilding of the Katrina building project and the consumer sentiment going into the year end.
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BabujeeThe comment is: What's wrong with it?
Market could anticipate Fed pause with the today data which will help the rebuilding of the Katrina building project and the consumer sentiment going into the year end.

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BabujeeThe comment is: What's wrong with it?
Market could anticipate Fed pause with the today data which will help the rebuilding of the Katrina building project and the consumer sentiment going into the year end.

I was asking whether someone can critique the above sentence. Emotion: smile

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Hi,

I'm not quite sure what is going on with these replies, but here is my critique of the sentence.

It sounds like the kind of abbreviated English syntax that news services send out. It is also a very poor sentence, and the meaning is not clear.

Market could anticipate Fed pause with the today data which will help the rebuilding of the Katrina building project and the consumer sentiment going into the year end.

Here is my revised version, trying to put it into good English.

The market could anticipate a pause (by the Federal government? By the Federal Reserve bank? By the Federal economy? I don't know what 'Fed pause means) because of today's information (or news). This (I don't know if 'this' should refer to the 'pause' or the 'news') will help both the Katrina rebuilding project and consumer confidence, as the year end approaches.

Best wishes, Clive

Hi Clive,

Thank you for your correction. The sentence is my market comment that I do after the equity market close. Obviously, if anyone is not observing the equity market, the sentence is not clear as well as it is grammatically incorrect. The combination of not-in-the-field and incorrect grammer makes it harder to understand. Emotion: embarrassed

I will try it again by rewriting my sentence with your correction:

The market could anticipate a pause from increasing the ST interest rate by the FOMC on 9/20. The pause will help both the Katrina rebuilding project and the consumer confidence, as the year end approaches.

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Hi,

The market could anticipate a pause from the (or 'an', if an increase is only a possibility)increase in the ST interest rate by the FOMC on 9/20. The pause will help both the Katrina rebuilding project and (omit 'the') consumer confidence, as the year end approaches.

Much, much better. Such things are hard to understand, as you say, if you are not in that field.

Best wishes, Clive
CliveHi,

The market could anticipate a pause from the (or 'an', if an increase is only a possibility)increase in the ST interest rate by the FOMC on 9/20. The pause will help both the Katrina rebuilding project and (omit 'the') consumer confidence, as the year end approaches.

Much, much better. Such things are hard to understand, as you say, if you are not in that field.

Best wishes, Clive

Hi Clive,

Thank you for your help. I will correct it.

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