this one was written about 4 years ago and my English's knowledge was lesser than now. It was also written in a very impulsive way, in a dark period of my life. I haven't changed the text even knowing there are lots of errors because it represents a part of my life and I like how it turned out. I'm not going to change it, but comments and critiques are appreciated.

WHEN THE LIGHTS ARE DOWN

Living in fear
you don't know why
your mind get crazy
you can't understand it at all.

Living in fear
get restless and blind
your life no longer yours
but what's controlling you.

Pain-all around
pain-in you
pain-can't get out of this shit
pain-yor most known enemy.

Your friends-gone
your love-too
your soul-none
your heart-empty.

You and your solitude
what a couple, she and you
with depression-for a tea in the garden
an happy meeting to decide your destiny.

And your friends...

telling you things'll go better
telling you hope never dies
telling you you're not alone
but where are they, when you need them?

All hypocrisies.

They can't know how life is dark when all the lights are down.
If you're not going to change it, I'm not going to bother.
well I don't want to change it, but I think there are mistakes I can't see and it woul be useful to know them ^^ bot grammatical and style errors