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Hi,

Most of the time when I look forward in my furture I see a world of challenges. But my past always looks to me a sea of pleasant memories although there have been many bad memories also. Almost everyone around me has changed into a hypocrite even people who were very nice some years ago. Whenever I look towards the stars I feel so comfortable that I can't explain. Almost every night I look at those stars, they are kind of friends to me. I have tried to paraphrase my above experience in the following paragraph. Please check it for grammatical and punctuation mistakes. You can substitute more suitable words, like I said world of pleasant memories, so, if you feel you can add sea of pleasant memories etc. You can make any kind of addtion to the following paragraph. Thank you.

When I look forward I see a world of challenges, when I look back I see a world of pleasant memories, when I look to myself I see a grown up man, and, when I see toward people around me they all have changed, and, when I see above toward the stars they appear the same as they were in my childhood, and, when I see the last day of my life I see a man dying in his bed and watching those stars because they are the ones which have never changed and perhaps they never will even after I die, so, I wish I become a part of them so that I will never change again neither will my fellow stars around me.
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When I look forwards I see a world of challenges, when I look back I see a world of pleasant memories and when I look to myself I see a grown man. (grown up is a childish expression). When I look at the people around me they all have changed but when I look above towards the stars they appear the same as they were in my childhood. When I imagine the last day of my life I see a man dying in his bed and watching those stars because they are the ones which have never changed and perhaps they never will even after I die.So, I wish I become a part of them so that I will never change again and neither will my fellow stars around me.
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When I look forwards I see a world of challenges, when I look back I see a world of pleasant memories and when I look to myself I see a grown man. When I look at the people around me they all have changed but when I look above towards the stars they appear the same as they were in my childhood. When I imagine the last day of my life I see a man dying in his bed and watching those stars because they are the ones which have never changed and perhaps they never will even after I die. So, I wish I become a part of them so that I will never change again and neither will my fellow stars around me.
Jackson6612Would someone elaborate/edit the following paragraph?

When I look forwards I see a world of challenges, when I look back I see a world of pleasant memories and when I look to myself I see a grown man. When I look at the people around me they all have changed but when I look above towards the stars they appear the same as they were in my childhood. When I imagine the last day of my life I see a man dying in his bed and watching those stars because they are the ones which have never changed and perhaps they never will even after I die. So, I wish I become a part of them so that I will never change again and neither will my fellow stars around me.

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