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The following paragraph is a part of my application letter. It has been commented by two interviewers. Up to this moment, i cannot find the problem from where. Have anyone help me?

"For the whole, I enclosed herewith my resume for your kind consideration and I hope my solid experience would properly help myself to develop my career in this field. I would like to success your business if future great cooperation can be achieved. I look forward to being granted an interview, when I shall be glad to explain myself to you more detail. "
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Tag's suggestions are good - but watch the spellings. You are tying yourself up in knots trying to sound too 'clever' - stick to expressing yourself clearly and simply for a better impression.

"For the whole (meaninless)

I enclose my resume for your consideration. I believe my solid experience (would properly help myself to develop my career in this field - leave this out -they are interested in what you can do for them not in the benefits to you) would help me contribute to your company's future success.
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hello!

some thoughts..

1) i would like to succeed in your business especially when cooperation is acheived? is this what you mean?

2) im looking forward for an interview wherein i can give you full details of my qualifications
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Ben9108The following paragraph is a part of my application letter. It has been commented by two interviewers. Up to this moment, i cannot find the problem from where. Have anyone help me?

"For the whole, I enclosed herewith my resume for your kind consideration and I hope my solid experience would properly help myself to develop my career in this field. I would like to success your business if future great cooperation can be achieved. I look forward to being granted an interview, when I shall be glad to explain myself to you more detail. "

Hmm confusing. try this "For your consideration I have enclosed my resume. I hope my solid experince will help me to further my career in this field. I would like the opportunity to show you that I can be a success in your business. I hope we can cooperate in the future. I look forward to being grated an interview and answereing any further questions you may have reguarding my experience, ambition and/or references."
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