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Hi,
Could somebody please have a look at this paragraph?

This law, as well as the subsequent regional law on spatial planning, imposed restrictions or even prohibition on building activity in various kinds of areas (for instance, volcanoes, tops of the mountains, common lands) because of either aesthetic or environmental reasons. In particular, building was forbidden within a 300-metre wide stripe along the coastline1, with the exception of urban areas already classed by the local masterplansas historical centres or areas designated for new developments . In addition, both these laws required that a PTP* planned those areas where building restrictions had been imposed by law. As a consequence, fourteen PTPs were approved by the regional government, and local masterplans had to make their zoning system consistent with that of the PTPs. However, thirteen out of those fourteen plans were declared unlawful2 by the Regional Administrative Court.
(* NOTE: what a PTP is has previously been stated – it is a particular type of spatial plan)

1 is it correct to refer to a buffer zone this way (width is important)?

2 I'm not sure that ‘unlawful’ is a correct choice here (I meant 'against the laws') ... but I couldn't come up with something better Emotion: sad

Please let me also know if you find any other mistake or unclear expression! Thank you in advance! Emotion: smile
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Hi,

Could somebody please have a look at this paragraph?


This law, as well as the subsequent regional law on spatial planning, imposed restrictions or even prohibition on building activity in various kinds of areas (for instance, volcanoes, tops of the mountains, common lands) because of either aesthetic or environmental reasons. In particular, building was forbidden within a 300-metre wide stripe along the coastline1, with the exception of urban areas already classed by the local master plans as historical centres or areas designated for new developments . In addition, both these laws required that a PTP* planned those areas where building restrictions had been imposed by law. As a consequence, fourteen PTPs were approved by the regional government, and local master plans had to make their zoning system consistent with that of the PTPs. However, thirteen out of those fourteen plans were declared unlawful2 by the Regional Administrative Court.

(* NOTE: what a PTP is has previously been stated – it is a particular type of spatial plan)

1 is it correct to refer to a buffer zone this way (width is important)? I think you may be intending to use the word 'strip'. That's a better choice.

2 I'm not sure that ‘unlawful’ is a correct choice here (I meant 'against the laws') ... but I couldn't come up with something better Perhaps 'illegal' would be a more common choice of word.

Please let me also know if you find any other mistake or unclear expression! Thank you in advance! I would write 'master plan' as two words.

This is very well written

Best wishes, Clive
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Hi Clive,
Thank you very much!
Clive1 I think you may be intending to use the word 'strip'. That's a better choice.
You're right Emotion: embarrassed what a sloppy mistake!
Clive2 Perhaps 'illegal' would be a more common choice of word.
Actually, I forget to say that I had used 'illegal' in the following sentence and I wanted to avoid a repetition. Would 'unlawful' be completely unnatural? Would it be better if I used 'illegal' twice?

Cheers!
Hi,

Actually, I forget to say that I had used 'illegal' in the following sentence and I wanted to avoid a repetition. Would 'unlawful' be completely unnatural? Not really.

Would it be better if I used 'illegal' twice? Maybe, it's just your choice. Either way is OK. Such technical/business writing focuses more on clarity than on elegance.

Clive
Thanks again, Clive. Emotion: smile
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