Hey guys! Can you correct the following letter pls? Thanks a million times for taking the trouble to correct it! Emotion: smile

Hey Aleksi,

I’m envious of you. I wish I could be having a good time now too. Actually, I went out to eat with a couple of friends of mine yesterday evening. We went to the restaurant called "Drova" (eng=wood). The main reason why we went there was that we wanted to celebrate my birthday which had been on Monday. Since it was my birthday ‘party’ it was I who had to pay for the dinner. Honestly, I only paid about 65% of the total sum. We spent about 2 hours enjoying great food at that restaurant. We also arranged to meet on Wednesday (November 30) to visit our school teachers. That’s why I’m not going to university this Wednesday.

You pay a great deal of money for your school. Even if I lived in Australia I think I couldn’t pay that much for either school or university. I pay nothing at all for my university. If I’d failed the exams I’d now have to pay about $6000 per annum. It’s considered a huge sum here in Russia. Nor can I afford to buy from brand shops (I mean brands like D&G, Vicinni, Armani etc.). What do you call shops like Springfield (I think it’s Spanish), New Yorker (German), Salamander (German shoes), Gallus (shoes), Adidas, Reebok etc. Yep, I’ve heard of FCUK. I’ve never worn it though. I think that Russians are not used to buying (relatively) expensive clothing because of the influence of the Soviet Union. There were basically no brands at the time and people wore clothes that they could buy or that were freely available.

I quite agree with you that the more money you have the better opportunity. In the market system it is always money that shows how well off you are. I’d say that I’m in the upper middle class. On the one hand, I can’t say that my parents earn loads of money but on the other hand, I’m pretty rich compared to most people.

Like I said, I’ve never dyed my hair any color. My mum and my sister dye their hair all the time. My sister’s natural hair color is brown (like my Dad’s one) but she’s been blond haired since about 14. She’s now 19. As for my Mom, I don’t remember clearly how long it’s been since she first dyed her hair. But my Mom’s natural hair color is very close to the color she dyes her hair now. I’ve absolutely no desire to dye my hair any color now. I see no need for it. All in all, I agree with you that people look weird after dying their hair.

Yes, you’re right that I’m seventeen. Even though you said that it’s not too late to start learning to skateboard now I feel that I’ll find it very tough to learn the basics. Most of the guys I know who’ve been into skateboarding for some 2-3 years have already learned the basics and they’re now learning to do various tricky things. I don’t think they’ll like it very much if I’m constantly asking them to help me. Anyways, we’ll see. Winter’s very close now, so I’d better think about ice hockey.

I gotta go now! Bye for now!

cheers,

Alex
I'm terribly sorry for all these MS Word's remarks. I just don't know how I can remove them.
Hello RdS

Looks pretty good to me. Here are a few suggestions. Square brackets = alternatives. Emboldened = probably better changed or deleted.

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Hey Aleksi,

I’m envious of you. I wish I could be having a good time now too. Actually, I went out to eat with a couple of friends of mine yesterday evening. We went to the restaurant called “Drova” (eng=wood). The main reason why we went there was that we wanted to celebrate my birthday which had been on Monday [which was on Monday]. Since it was my birthday ‘party’ it was I who had to pay for the dinner. Honestly, I only paid about 65% of the total sum. We spent about 2 hours enjoying great food at that restaurant. We also arranged to meet on Wednesday (November 30) to visit our school teachers. That’s why I’m not going to university this Wednesday.

You pay a great deal of money for your school.[Your school seems very expensive] Even if I lived in Australia I think I couldn’t pay that much for either school or university . I pay nothing at all for my university. If I’d failed the exams I’d now have to pay about $6000 per annum. It’s considered a huge sum here in Russia. Nor can I afford to buy from brand shops [designer labels] (I mean brands like D&G, Vicinni, Armani etc.) What do you call shops like Springfield (I think it’s Spanish), New Yorker (German), Salamander (German shoes), Gallus (shoes), Adidas, Reebok etc. Yep, I’ve heard of ***. I’ve never worn it though. I think that Russians are not used to buying (relatively) expensive clothing because of the influence of the Soviet Union. There were basically no brands at the time and people [just] wore clothes that they could buy [afford] or that were freely available.

I quite agree with you that the more money you have[, ] the better opportunity [your opportunities]. In the market system it is always money that shows how well off you are. I’d say that I’m in the upper middle class. On the one hand, I can’t say that my parents earn loads of money but on the other hand, I’m pretty rich compared to most people.

Like I said, I’ve never dyed my hair any color. My mum and my sister dye their hair all the time. My sister’s natural hair color is brown (like my Dad’s one) but she’s been blond[e] haired since [she was] about 14. She’s now 19. As for my Mom, I don’t remember clearly how long it’s been since she first dyed her hair. But my Mom’s natural hair color is very close to the color she dyes her hair now. I’ve absolutely no desire to dye my hair any color now. I see no need for it. All in all, I agree with you that people look weird after dying their hair.

Yes, you’re right that I’m seventeen. Even though you said that it’s not too late to start learning to skateboard now I feel that I’ll find it very tough to learn the basics. Most of the guys I know who’ve been into skateboarding for some 2-3 years have already learned the basics and they’re now learning to do various tricky things. I don’t think they’ll like it very much if I’m constantly asking them to help me. Anyways [Anyway], we’ll see. Winter’s very close now, so I’d better think about ice hockey.

I gotta go now! Bye for now!

cheers,

Alex

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MrP
Students: Are you brave enough to let our tutors analyse your pronunciation?
Thanks a million times for the answer! I've made a few changes in accordance with your suggestions.

Hey Aleksi,

I’m envious of you. I wish I could be having a good time now too. Actually, I went out to eat with a couple of friends of mine yesterday evening. We went to the restaurant called “Drova” (eng=wood). The main reason that we went there was that we wanted to celebrate my birthday which had been on Monday [which was on Monday] (are both sentences correct or does yours sound better?). Since it was my birthday ‘party’ I was the one who had to pay for the dinner. Honestly, I only paid about 65% of the total sum. We spent about 2 hours enjoying great food at that restaurant. We also arranged to meet on Wednesday (November 30) to visit our school teachers. That’s why I’m not going to university this Wednesday.

Your school seems very expensive. Even if I lived in Australia I don't think I'd have to pay that much. I pay nothing at all for my university. (can you explain why I can't use the pronoun 'my' here?) If I’d failed the exams I’d now have to pay about $6000 per annum. It’s considered a huge sum here in Russia. Nor can I afford to buy from brand shops [designer labels] (well, to buy from brand shops - that's what the Australian girl I'm writing this letter to wrote herself). (I mean brands like D&G, Vicinni, Armani etc.) What do you call shops like Springfield (I think it’s Spanish), New Yorker (German), Salamander (German shoes), Gallus (shoes), Adidas, Reebok etc. Yep, I’ve heard of ***.(I wrote F C U K but the regulations of the forum of the forum seem to be very strict)) I’ve never worn it though. I don't think Russians are used to buying (relatively) expensive clothing because of the influence of the Soviet Union. There were basically no brands at the time and people [just] wore clothes that they could afford or that were freely available.

I quite agree with you that the more money you have[, ] the better your opportunities (again, the Aussie girl wrote 'the better opportunity'). In the market system it is always money that shows how well off you are. I’d say that I’m in the upper middle class. On the one hand, I can’t say that my parents earn loads of money but on the other hand, I’m pretty rich compared to most people.

Like I said, I’ve never dyed my hair any color. My mum and my sister dye their hair all the time. My sister’s natural hair color is brown (like my Dad’s one) (can you explain the error?) but she’s been blond haired (what does it mean?) since [she was] about 14. She’s now 19. As for my Mom, I don’t remember clearly how long it’s been since she first dyed her hair. But my Mom’s natural hair color is very close to the color she dyes her hair now. I’ve absolutely no desire to dye my hair any color now. I see no need for it. All in all, I agree with you that people look weird after dying their hair.

Yes, you’re right that I’m seventeen. Even though you said that it’s not too late to start learning to skateboard now I feel that I’ll find it very tough to learn the basics. Most of the guys I know who’ve been into skateboarding for some 2-3 years have already learned the basics and they’re now learning to do various tricky things. I don’t think they’ll like it very much if I’m constantly asking them to help me. Anyways [Anyway], we’ll see. Winter’s very close now, so I’d better think about ice hockey.

I gotta go now! Bye for now!

cheers,

Alex

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