Hi,

I was asked to write an invitation for an opening.
I've already written it.
I would like to know if you can help me checking it, please!

The university is pleased to invite you to the presentation of its "System of Cool Students" and to the opening of the Cool classrooms:

class 1
class 2

To be held on Wednesday, December 24, 2010 at 2:00 pm in the "Steve Gates" Auditorium of the Rector Building.
Located at 3855 Rodeo Drive, New York.

Cocktail
Please let us know if you plan to attend

For more information, press kit and location map:
www.google.com

If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact us.
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789 45 12

This is going to be send to many places all around the world, that's why I would like to do the best.
Hope you can help me.

Thanks in advanced
1 2
'Cocktail' on its own doesn't mean anything.

Cocktails will be served

Cocktail dress to be worn

other meaning intended?
uh-huh. it's okay. but i agree with the cocktail thing. It doesn't make sense.And please capatalize class 1, as in, Class 1.
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Hi,

Here are some suggestions. I assume the name of the University is on the 'letter-head'.

The university is pleased to invite you to a presentation on its "System of Cool Students" and to the opening of the 'Cool' classrooms: if people don't know anything at all about this 'cool' system, you might want to add a very brief comment about it

class 1 I'd omit this detail


class 2 omit

To be held on Wednesday, December 24, 2010 (wait a minute, let me check my calendar to see if I'm busy in 2010Emotion: smile ) at 2:00 pm in the "Steve Gates" Auditorium of the Rector Building, 3855 Rodeo Drive, New York.

Cocktails at 1:30 pm.
Please let us know if you plan to attend

For more information, press kit and location map:
www.google.com

If you have any questions, please do not hesitate to contact us.
[email protected]
[email protected]
789 45 12
Is this how you write your phone number?

Best wishes, Clive
Sorry for the delay!

It's been kind of bussy.
First of all Thank you very much for taking the time to read.
I appreciate very much your advice.

nona the brit :

I'm trying to say that after the "presentation" people will have some wine and aperitives.
How can I say this?

English_teacher :

Don't worry the originals are capitalized.
Clive :

"to a presentation on its" does it have the same meaning?
we are planning to send some more information in a second mail as a remainder.
Thank you for the advice!
Hi,

"to a presentation on its . . ." This sounds like you will tell me about something.

"to a presentation of its . . . " This sounds like you will show me something.

Best wishes, Clive
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Hi!

I didn't know that "expression".

Thank you.
does anybody have any suggestion about "cocktail", which word can I use instead?
Hi,

Nona just meant that the word is 'cocktails' rather than 'cocktail'.

On an invitation, 'cocktails' means that alcoholic drinks will be available, often with small snacks as well. People stand around and talk, and meet each other, and drink a little.

Best wishes, Clive
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