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Hi

Could you please see the following and help me make it natural? Any suggestion is welcome. I am sure I am going to regret a lot in this piece.

With misty eyes and a lumb in her throat, she made a statement about her biological parents that undeniably was deprived of a single cell of truth in it. Though she tried her hardest to hide the (insincere?) affectations, they were too stong for her meagre attempt(s).

Thanks,

Tom
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Mr. Tom, there are thousands, if not millions, of native speakers who can't write worth a damn. I call it "job security." Take heart - you're already doing better than many.
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lump, not lumb.

This is a different way to say it, not necessarily a better way.

With misty eyes and a lump in her throat she made a statement about her biological parents that clearly lacked even a shred of truth. She tried her hardest to hide her insincerity but ultimately failed in her pathetic attempts.

CJ
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Many thanks, CJ.

When I first wrote this paragraph, I used "lacked a modicum of truth", but then decided to use "a cell of truth" in contrast with "biological parents". But now I have changed my version as per your advice.

By the way, how long will it take me to write effective and natural English? Emotion: sad (blush to ask....)

Tom
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Amen.

CJ
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Mr. Tomhow long will it take me to write effective and natural English?
Oof! Like all the rest of us, your entire life.* But look at the bright side -- it just keeps getting better from here on out!

CJ

*The great American playwright Edward Albee was once asked, of a play he had just written, how long it took him to write it. His answer: my entire life.