Is this sentence clear or is there a better choice:
He will advise his supervisor what materials have been ordered and what needs to be ordered.
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Lisa BrinkmannIs this sentence clear or is there a better choice:
I'm not happy with "what needs to be ordered". You mention materials specifically at first, and then you switch to a catchall "what". If you mean that additional materials will need to be ordered, you should say that: "He will advise his supervisor what materials have been ordered and what materials need to be ordered." If what needs to be ordered includes draft animals, bulldozers, entertainers, and skywriting, then you're OK.
I'm not happy with "what needs to be ordered". You mention materials specifically at first, and then you switch to a catchall "what". If you mean that additional materials will need to be ordered, you should say that: "He will advise his supervisor what materials have been ordered and what materials need to be ordered." If what needs to be ordered includes draft animals, bulldozers, entertainers, and skywriting, then you're OK.
Thank you!