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Hi,
I have just written a letter which will go along with my CV and a couple of other forms to Ford Motor Company (in uk). I am 14 years old and in year 10. Could you please give me advice on the letter so far and maybe how to round it off nicely. Thanks a lot.

My address 1

2

3

postcode

telephone

5th June 2007

Mr. ***,

Address 1

Address 2

3,

4,

5,

6,

postcode.

Dear Mr. ***,

I am writing to you to apply for a work experience place at Ford Motor Company between the 12th November 2007 and the 23rd November 2007.

Currently, I am a fourteen year old student in year 10 at the *** school. When I finish my compulsory education, I plan to go to sixth form. After this I hope to continue higher education by going to university.

As well as taking all required subjects and my three chosen options (French, I.T. and History) I chose to take Music and Astronomy after school. Unfortunately, the teacher was unable to continue the Astronomy classes and I have will have to wait until next year to continue this subject.

I am particularly interested in English, I.T. and History. Learning about the past is very appealing to me and in I.T. I have managed to develop a skill of touch typing rather quickly. I enjoy English because I enjoy creative writing. We got to extensively write creatively in one piece of coursework this year, which I received an A* for.

I have enclosed a CV with this letter, which contains my predicted grades from our Spring Term Monitoring. I do not feel these grades are accurate in all cases. For example, in I.T I have been predicted a C grade. This in fact, was the case for every pupil in my class. Also, since this monitoring took place, our school has changed the course from DIDA to OCR Nationals. I believe I will receive a much higher grade than this by the end of the year. One example of me doing well in I.T. was in year 7, when I won an award for best student of the year. In History, I was also predicted a B grade. We have recently taken our year 10 tests, which are comprised of actual GCSE questions. I received an A in History, which I am confident I will get in the real GCSEs. In Science, I was Predicted a B grade. In our most recent set of science of science exams I received two A* grades and an A grade. I believe I will receive higher than a B here too. In RE I was also predicted a B. I do not believe this grade to be accurate either due to our teacher being away for a majority of the year so far. In this time we have had a supply teacher. At the end of last year we had a test in RE which I received a level 7, which is the highest possible level. I hope to achieve an A in this subject. Finally, in music I am predicted a D. Due to this lesson taking place optionally, after school, I was not able to attend for an extended period of time due to a family issue. I hope to soon be back on track in this subject.
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To be honest, I think this letter is written very well, but I don't think that it contains the right information - the employer would probably like to know more about your previous experience and whether they could get a reference for you. You would also need to say in which area of the company you wish to work. Ford is a big company and there are many different areas of it, some of which would not interest you. Depending on which you are interested in, you might wish to mention some of the subjects you are taking, and whether you think these skills would be useful in your chosen area.

However, I don't think that explaining why you didn't get particularly good grades is going to help you. Blaming others for your mistakes sounds spiteful, and many employers wouldn't be impresses by this. Sometimes you have to take responsibility for these mistakes and say that you are working hard to improve your results, instead of sounding whiny and passing the responsisibility onto someone else. Since the results in this extract are not particularly good, I wouldn't mention them if they aren't crucial to attain the position you want.

In conclusion, I think that you need to mention why you want the position, which position you want, your previous experience, the important results, and finish by repeating why you want the job, and thanking them for their time. I hope you get it!
you should write more about what you will do at your job.

I have enclosed a CV with this letter, which contains my predicted grades from our Spring Term Monitoring. I do not feel these grades are accurate in all cases.
If you have wrote that them you dont need to give examples trust me i am a A* university graduate and passed english with a degreee
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Anonymous, you have clarified his letter beautifully. So much so that I'm compelled to ask if you could help me with my resume!