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Dear Sir/Madam,
I would like to express my interest in the PhD position on computer science in the Institute of the computer engineering department.
I am particularly eager to apply for a PhD in computer science because doing research in this field is very suitable for my research interest. While studying for my BA in mathematics at the ABC University in ER, I have been interested in interdesciplinary activities and real world problems. Thereafter, I was admitted to the ABC University, ER branch for my MSc, and I opted to go with chose to do it in Applied Mathematics- Numerical Analysis. I was very interested in doing research for my Master's project in cancer theretment. So I chose a topic called "Mathematics in natural science" and studied about it. But unfortunately, since interdisciplinary work is limited in ER, I could not find a professor for collaboration. Afterwards, I became interested in working in field " Mathematics and application". I talked to several doctors and professors, but unfortunately no one cooperated. And because I was so interested in interdisciplinary work, I succeeded and worked with a professor of physics. My master's thesis, under the supervision of Dr. Eric, was on "mathematical technique in physics" which gave me a deeper knowledge of the application of mathematics to other sciences and aroused my interest in it.
I now wish to pursue advance my academic career with PhD in computer science, and I cannot imagine a better place to study in this field than the computer engineering institute at HHH University. With the your department specializing in computer science, this is the ideal place to pursue a PhD in this field.
I am confident that I can complete the research project, because I have always been interested in dealing with new chalenges, and also doing and updated research related to mathematical application in other field. and I have gained a complete thorough understanding of it. and, also, I have recognise the importance of studying in this field. I believe that these skills of mathenatical techniques and experience will allow me to effectively complete a larger-scale project such as a PhD.
After completing the PhD, I intend to pursue a postdoc in computer science. With a lifelong interest in computer science, I am keen to continue my education in this area field and to perform my own research that can in order to help to extend the knowledge in this field.
Thank you so much for considering my application.
Yours faithfully,
M M
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Dear Sir/Madam,

I would like to express my interest in the PhD position on +++ in the Faculty of Science, Institute of +++ at +++ University.

I am particularly eager to apply for a PhD in +++ because doing research in this field is very suitable for my academic background. While studying for my BA in mathematics at the +++ University in +++, I took courses in probability and statistics and became familiar with the concepts of probability. Thereafter, I was admitted to the +++ University, +++ branch for my MSc, and I opted to go with chose to do it in Applied Mathematics- Numerical Analysis. My master's thesis, under the supervision of Dr. Rabbani, was on "+++" which gave me a deeper knowledge of probability theory and aroused my interest in it.

I now wish to pursue advance my academic career with PhD in +++, and I cannot imagine a better place to study in this field than the +++ institute at +++ University. With the your department specializing in probability theory, this is the ideal place to pursue a PhD in this field.

I am confident that I can complete the research project, because I have already studied for four months and gained experience in this field, and in my master's project related to probability theory and stochastic processes, I have gained a complete thorough understanding of it. and, also, I have recognise the importance of studying in this field. I believe that these skills and experience will allow me to effectively complete a larger-scale project such as a PhD.

After completing the PhD, I intend to pursue a postdoc in +++. With a lifelong interest in probability theory, I am keen to continue my education in this area field and to perform my own research that can in order to help to extend the knowledge in this field.

Thank you so much for considering my application.

Yours faithfully,

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Hello Anonymous;

If you want my feedback, you will have to register here. I do not spend time and effort on those who don't take the few seconds of time to register. All these anonymous posts are all lumped together and do not reflect the work of individuals.

Registration is completely free. There is no cost. Also, if you give an email address (not required) you can choose to get notifications when someone replies to your post.

Further, your letter is nearly impossible to read with all the +++ omissions. If you would substitute other reasonable words for the +++ , it would be possible to give you some advice.

For example, instead of

PhD position on +++ in the +++ Institute of the +++ department.

Write:

PhD position on Cosmology in the Princeton Institute of the Astrophysics department.

Then we can get those little prepositions to be more natural English. And in your private copy, you can remove the substitutes and reinsert the actual words.

There are copious grammatical errors in your letter, by the way.

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Mina MoazzenI would like to express my interest in the PhD position on computer science

This sounds like you are applying for a job as a professor. Is that what you mean?

Mina MoazzenI am particularly eager to apply for a PhD in computer science because doing research in this field is very suitable for my research interest.

That is very uninformative. I like X because I am interested in it. Boring and not very motivating.

Mina MoazzenWhile studying for my BA in mathematics at the ABC University in ER, I have been interested in interdesciplinary activities and real world problems.

Wrong tense and wrong spelling If you are interested a field, it is not very impressive if you cannot spell it.

"Activities" does not make much sense in an academic context.

Mina Moazzen and I opted to go with chose to do it in

Ungrammatical. You have two phrasal verbs annexed.

Mina MoazzenI was very interested in doing research for my Master's project in cancer theretment

If you have done research in a subject area, it is not very impressive if you cannot spell it.

Also what is the connection between cancer and numerical analysis?

Mina Moazzentopic called "Mathematics in natural science" and studied about it.

That topic has entire sections of big libraries with thousands of books dedicated to the subject.

Your story is not very convincing.

Mina Moazzen Afterwards, I became interested in working in field " Mathematics and application".

Again, this is an incredibly broad area of academia. The reader believes that you are unfocused.

Mina MoazzenI talked to several doctors and professors, but unfortunately no one cooperated.

Why? Are you convincing the reader not to cooperate with you?

Mina Moazzenand aroused my interest in it.

You gave the impression that you were already interested in this subject. Did you lose interest and then gain it again?

Mina MoazzenI now wish to pursue advance my academic career with PhD in computer science

Ungrammatical

Mina MoazzenWith the your department specializing in computer science

Almost every university has a large Computer Science department. You are not very convincing.

Mina Moazzen this is the ideal place to pursue a PhD in this field.

Why? You make statements and do not give specific reasons.

Mina MoazzenI have always been interested in dealing with new chalenges,

Every other applicant will be interested in challenges. How are you different? You have not distinguished yourself in any material way.

Mina Moazzenalso doing and updated research related to mathematical application in other field. and I have gained a complete thorough understanding of it. and, also, I have recognise the importance of studying in this field.

You need to show proof of your claims.

Your writing is repetitive, too general, superficial, and uninteresting.


If you were the decision maker, why would you choose this candidate over the hundreds of other applications?

There is nothing unique or compelling about this letter. The person who wrote it does not mention any extracurricular activities or any specific reasons for their past choices (other than a failure) or any work experience in industry. They do not mention any specific challenges they had in the past, and how they overcame them. They do not mention anyone who would recommend them, any journal publications they contributed to, or any special awards or recognitions.

I question whether they can focus on very specific research or cooperate with others.

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Dear Sir/Madam,
I would like to express my interest in the PhD position on +++ in the Faculty of Science, Institute of +++ at +++ University.
I am particularly eager to apply for a PhD in +++ because doing research in this field is very suitable for my academic background. While studying BA in mathematics at the +++ University in +++, I took courses in probability statistics and became familiar with the concepts of probability. Thereafter, I was admitted to the +++ University, +++ branch for my MSc, and I opted to go with Applied Mathematics- Numerical Analysis. My master's thesis, under the supervision of Dr. Rabbani, was on "+++" which gave me a deeper knowledge of probability theory and aroused my interest in it.
I now wish to pursue my academic career with PhD in +++, and I cannot imagine a better place to study in this field than the +++ institute at +++ University. With the Department specializing in probability theory, this is the ideal place to pursue a PhD in this field.

I am confident that I can complete the research project, because I have already studied for 4 months and gained experience in this field, and in my master's project related to probability theory and stochastic processes, I have gained a complete understanding and, also, I have recognised importance of studying in this field. I believe that these skills and experience will allow me to effectively complete a larger-scale project such as a PhD.
After completing the PhD, I intend to pursue postdoc in +++. With a lifelong interest in probability theory, I am keen to continue my education in this field and to perform my own research that can help to extend the knowledge in this field.
Thank you so much for considering my application.

Yours faithfully,

M M

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Dear teacher,

Thank you so much for your help.

Kind regards,

M M

Dear Sir/Madam,
I would like to express my interest in the PhD position on +++ in the +++ Institute of the +++ department.
I am particularly eager to apply for a PhD in +++ because doing research in this field is very suitable for my research interest. While studying for my BA in mathematics at the +++ University in +++, I have been interested in interdesciplinary activities and real world problems. Thereafter, I was admitted to the +++ University, +++ branch for my MSc, and I opted to go with chose to do it in Applied Mathematics- Numerical Analysis. I was very interested in doing research for my Master's project in cancer theretment. So I chose a topic called "+++" and studied about it. But unfortunately, since interdisciplinary work is limited in +++, I could not find a professor for collaboration. Afterwards, I became interested in working in field " +++". I talked to several doctors and professors, but unfortunately no one cooperated. And because I was so interested in interdisciplinary work, I succeeded and worked with a professor of physics. My master's thesis, under the supervision of Dr. +++, was on "+++" which gave me a deeper knowledge of the application of mathematics to other sciences and aroused my interest in it.
I now wish to pursue advance my academic career with PhD in +++, and I cannot imagine a better place to study in this field than the +++ institute at +++ University. With the your department specializing in +++, this is the ideal place to pursue a PhD in this field.
I am confident that I can complete the research project, because I have always been interested in dealing with new chalenges, and also doing and updated research related to mathematical application in other field. and I have gained a complete thorough understanding of it. and, also, I have recognise the importance of studying in this field. I believe that these skills of mathenatical techniques and experience will allow me to effectively complete a larger-scale project such as a PhD.
After completing the PhD, I intend to pursue a postdoc in +++. With a lifelong interest in +++, I am keen to continue my education in this area field and to perform my own research that can in order to help to extend the knowledge in this field.
Thank you so much for considering my application.
Yours faithfully,
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Dear teacher,

I already registered, but now I enter my email address. There is a message for me that my email address is invalid! For this problem, I sent an email to the English Forward team. But the problem still exists.

Best regards,


M M

Dear teacher,

I already registered, but now I enter my email address. There is a message for me that my email address is invalid! For this problem, I sent an email to the English furom team. But the problem still exists.

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M M

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Dear Sir/Madam,


I would like to express my interest in the PhD position on computer science in the Institute of the computer engineering department.
I am particularly eager to apply for a PhD in computer science because doing research in this field is very suitable for my research interest. While studying for my BA in mathematics at the ABC University in ER, I have been interested in interdesciplinary activities and real world problems. Thereafter, I was admitted to the ABC University, ER branch for my MSc, and I opted to go with chose to do it in Applied Mathematics- Numerical Analysis. I was very interested in doing research for my Master's project in cancer theretment. So I chose a topic called "Mathematics in natural science" and studied about it. But unfortunately, since interdisciplinary work is limited in ER, I could not find a professor for collaboration. Afterwards, I became interested in working in field " Mathematics and application". I talked to several doctors and professors, but unfortunately no one cooperated. And because I was so interested in interdisciplinary work, I succeeded and worked with a professor of physics. My master's thesis, under the supervision of Dr. Eric, was on "mathematical technique in physics" which gave me a deeper knowledge of the application of mathematics to other sciences and aroused my interest in it.
I now wish to pursue advance my academic career with PhD in computer science, and I cannot imagine a better place to study in this field than the computer engineering institute at HHH University. With the your department specializing in computer science, this is the ideal place to pursue a PhD in this field.
I am confident that I can complete the research project, because I have always been interested in dealing with new chalenges, and also doing and updated research related to mathematical application in other field. and I have gained a complete thorough understanding of it. and, also, I have recognise the importance of studying in this field. I believe that these skills of mathenatical techniques and experience will allow me to effectively complete a larger-scale project such as a PhD.
After completing the PhD, I intend to pursue a postdoc in computer science. With a lifelong interest in computer science, I am keen to continue my education in this area field and to perform my own research that can in order to help to extend the knowledge in this field.
Thank you so much for considering my application.
Yours faithfully,M M

Dear teechr, would you please correct my letter?

Thank you so much.

M M

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Dear Sir/Madam,


I would like to express my interest in the PhD position on computer science in the Institute of the computer engineering department.
I am particularly eager to apply for a PhD in computer science because doing research in this field is very suitable for my research interest. While studying for my BA in mathematics at the ABC University in ER, I have been interested in interdesciplinary activities and real world problems. Thereafter, I was admitted to the ABC University, ER branch for my MSc, and I opted to go with chose to do it in Applied Mathematics- Numerical Analysis. I was very interested in doing research for my Master's project in cancer theretment. So I chose a topic called "Mathematics in natural science" and studied about it. But unfortunately, since interdisciplinary work is limited in ER, I could not find a professor for collaboration. Afterwards, I became interested in working in field " Mathematics and application". I talked to several doctors and professors, but unfortunately no one cooperated. And because I was so interested in interdisciplinary work, I succeeded and worked with a professor of physics. My master's thesis, under the supervision of Dr. Eric, was on "mathematical technique in physics" which gave me a deeper knowledge of the application of mathematics to other sciences and aroused my interest in it.
I now wish to pursue advance my academic career with PhD in computer science, and I cannot imagine a better place to study in this field than the computer engineering institute at HHH University. With the your department specializing in computer science, this is the ideal place to pursue a PhD in this field.
I am confident that I can complete the research project, because I have always been interested in dealing with new chalenges, and also doing and updated research related to mathematical application in other field. and I have gained a complete thorough understanding of it. and, also, I have recognise the importance of studying in this field. I believe that these skills of mathenatical techniques and experience will allow me to effectively complete a larger-scale project such as a PhD.
After completing the PhD, I intend to pursue a postdoc in computer science. With a lifelong interest in computer science, I am keen to continue my education in this area field and to perform my own research that can in order to help to extend the knowledge in this field.
Thank you so much for considering my application.
Yours faithfully,
M M
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