You need to write a draft letter first. Please keep all personal and sensitive information out of your letter. Use placeholders where necessary.
Mr. Magoo indicated to Mr. Grinch that my son James Dean blah blah blah.
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I would like to take this opportunity to thanks you for putting our son Mike in the waiting list, a year ago.
As you know, we had attended Victoria School, as did our son, and we consider that the educational and school facilities, it offers are quite exceptional. Mike like your school very much and his ex-classmate already transfer to your school. Hopefuly he can join very soon.
Until today, we had not heard from you, we should be grateful if you would let us know at your earliest convenience.
Thank you for your attention to this matter.
Here's one version....
The purpose of this letter is to inquire as to the status of Mike LastName's application for admission to your school. We were informed in November 2003 that our son was placed on a waiting list.
My husband and I attended Victoria School, as did our son (different son?) John. We have great respect for the teachers and the school's program and reputation, and we think highly of the school's facilities. Thus, we have encouraged Mike to pursue his dreams and aspirations at your school.
We are aware that other students are being notified as to their status. We would greatly appreciate knowing Mike's status so that we can plan accordingly.
Thank you for your attention to this matter, and we look forward to your positive reply.
Note the punctuation,
Sir - Capital S
followed by a colon (North America) or (I think) a comma (Europe)
sincerely, (small s)
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