It is a controversial topic that children should be thought at home rather than go to school. For me, these methods both develop students, no matter where they learn.


On the one hand, It is essential for pupils to learn at home. At first, It helps students much more concentrate on the lessons, instead of talking with their friends during the lectures at school. For examples, my cousin, Jack, said that he could only focus and understand the lessons thoroughly when he studied at home as nothing can distract him. Besides, parents can find their offspring's weaknesses through the lessons and help them improve. However, the school's teachers do not have enough time to take care of each student.


On the other hand, children need to go to school. Firstly, It is not only built knowledge but also social skills. This meant that they can enjoy their school life like their friends. Playing sports, participating in clubs, making new friends, to name but a few. Furthermore, It poses an impression on them to study more. When seeing their peers encompass them. Students will try their best shot to keep up with. For example, Queen university has pointed out that around 67% of students studied hard as they had fear of being failed behind their friends.


To conclude, though I agree that it is more important for children to study at home because it boosts their concentration and drawbacks, I think going to school is also necessary as it develops kid's social skills and competition.

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Write about the following topic. Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own...


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It is a controversial topic that children should be thought (wrong word.) at home rather than go to school. For me, these methods both develop students, no matter where they learn.

You really need to pick one side or the other. Give a definite opinion, not something that is vague. The side you agree with is the second body paragraph. Your essay will be much improved.


On the one hand, It is essential for pupils to learn at home. At first, It (wrong capitalization) helps students (Pupils are different from students. Which group are you going to write about?) much more (wrong word order) concentrate much more on the lessons, instead of talking with their friends during the lectures (Lectures are for university, not primary school) classes at school. For examples, my cousin, Jack, said that he could only focus and understand the lessons thoroughly when he studied at home as nothing can distract him. Besides, parents can find their offspring's (wrong word. Offspring relates to animals, not people.) weaknesses through the lessons and help them improve. However, (not a good transition word here.) the school's teachers do not have enough time to take care of each student.


On the other hand, children need to go to school. Firstly, First, It (wrong capitalization) is not only built (wrong verb form) knowledge but also social skills. This meant (wrong verb form) that they can enjoy their school life like with their friends. Playing sports, participating in clubs, and making new friends, to name two but a few. (A few is more than two) Furthermore, It (wrong capitalization) poses an impression on motivates them to study more. When seeing their peers encompass them. ( That is not a sentence.) Students will try their best shot to keep up with their classmates. For example, Queen university Queen's University has pointed out that around 67% of students studied hard as they had a fear of falling being failed behind their friends.


To conclude, though I agree that it is more important for children to study at home because it boosts their concentration and drawbacks, (It boosts their drawbacks? That makes no sense.) I think going to school is also necessary as it develops kid's their social skills and competition. (Wrong word)


Pupils are students, but the reverse is not true. Pupils are very young students in the first years of school.

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