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Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs.

To what extend do you agree or disagree?


In this day and age, it is generally believed people who have stable jobs can get a satisfying career life than those who change jobs frequently. However, personally, I think the opposite is true.

Firstly, a convincing opinion to oppose this thinking is that you can have a lot of experiences from working several jobs. This means that you don’t need to be afraid of being unemployed because with your experience, you would be welcomed by lots of companies.

The second reason why this issue is disagreed upon is that loyalty costs no value. In this modern and fast life, the demand of society fluctuates day by day. Now, bank clerk is a really good job, but in the next few years being computer science maybe a good decision. So those who are flexible and smart can know which job is suitable for them at that time. Changing is not a crime, therefore you can change and do every jobs until you have your favorite job.

The final notion which is no less important is that you go out of your safe zone, you can try the job that they cannot. In addition, you can make impossible things possible. Consequently, you have opportunities to broaden your knowledge and be stronger in this life. Also, you can get a lot of soft skills from working several jobs.

In conclusion, I totally disagree with people who choose job early and still do it for a long time can have satisfying career life than those who are frequently change jobs. For all above reason, I admit that changing job frequently can give you a lot of good things in life

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In this day and age, it is generally believed (That is not a good paraphrase of the topic. "Generally believed" means most, if not all people believe this. The topic says "some people". "Some" is much less than half. That is quite different.) that people who have stable jobs can get a more ("more" is required to go with "than". ) satisfying career life than those who change jobs frequently. However, personally, I think the opposite is true.

Firstly, First, a convincing argument opinion (wrong word. You do not convince people with an opinion.) to oppose this thinking is that you can have a lot of experiences from by working several jobs. Also, you can get a lot of soft skills from working several jobs. (This sentence fits the main idea of this paragraph, not the fourth paragraph.) This means that you don’t need to be afraid of being unemployed because with your experience, you would be welcomed by lots of companies.

The second reason why this is not true issue (wrong word. It is an opinion, not a problem. see note 1 below.) is disagreed upon (wrong expression) is that loyalty is not valued. costs (wrong word) no value. In this modern and hectic fast life, the demands of society fluctuate day by day. Now, a bank clerk is a really good job, but in the next few years being a computer scientist computer science maybe a good decision. So those who are flexible and smart can know which job is suitable for them at that time. There is no penalty for changing jobs, Changing is not a crime, therefore you can change and do every jobs (ungrammatical) until you have found your favorite job.

The final point, notion (wrong word) which is no less important, is that you can go out of your safe zone; experimenting with a variety of vocations. you can try the job that they cannot. In addition, you can make impossible things possible. Consequently, you have opportunities to broaden your knowledge and be stronger in this life. Also, you can get a lot of soft skills from working several jobs.

In conclusion, I totally disagree with people who choose job early and still do it for a long time can have satisfying career life than those who are frequently change jobs. (ungrammatical) For all above reason, I admit that Changing jobs frequently can give you a lot of good things in life (missing punctuation)


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Career councilors often advise graduates seeking their first job to pick an excellent and reputable company and plan to have lifelong employment there. They argue that sticking with one company will give them a much more satisfying career than job-hopping. While there are merits to this position, I totally disagree with it.


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Nguyễn Minh TuấnTo what extent do you agree or disagree?

The word "extend" is incorrect in that sentence. Extend is a verb.
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The teacher will extend the deadline for handing in the homework by two days.
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