I would be grateful if you could correct my writing errors. it's ielts writing task 1.
The line graph indicates the number of people who had visited four international museums in millions between 1980 and 2015.
Overall, the two most popular museums (Louvre and Vatican) had an increase in the number of visitors, whereas, the trend for Shenzhen museum remained stable with slight fluctuation and the callers in London museum fell moderately.
According to the graph, Louvre museum which had most visitors, stood at 8 million in 1980, then the number of visitors with fluctuated trend reached almost 9.6 million in 2015. There was a gradual rise in the number of visitors for Vatican museum by 4 million, starting from 1980 to 2015.
With regard to the graph, the number of visitors in museum leveled off at 4 million from 1980 to 1985. Then it declined steadily of 2 million in 2015.
The number of visitors in Shenzhen museum stood at just less than that in London museum in 1980, then 1990 saw slightly decline near 3 million in number of visitors. Again it was just as same as that in London museum during 1990 to 1200. Further by ascending constantly returned to near 4 million in 2015.
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The line graph indicates the number of people (in millions) who had visited four international museums in millions between 1980 and 2015.
Overall, the two most popular museums (the Louvre and the Vatican Museum) had an increase in the number of visitors, whereas the trend number for the Shenzhen [ 1] Museum saw little overall change, and remained stable with slight fluctuation and the callers in the London museum experienced a moderate decline in visitor numbers. fell moderately.
According to the graph, the Louvre [ 2] museum which had the most visitors, stood at 8 million in 1980, then the number of visitors with fluctuated trend a little but increased and reached almost 9.6 million in 2015. In contrast, there was a gradual sustained and significant rise in the number of visitors for to the Vatican Museum, by 4 million, starting which almost doubled from just under five million in 1980 to almost 9.5 million by 2015.
With regard to the graph, the number of visitors in The London Science Museum leveled started off at four million from 1980 to 1985. Then it but declined steadily of to reach about two million in by 2015.
The number of visitors in Finally, the Shenzhen museum started off and ended at around four million visitors, despite a slight dip in the middle. stood at just less than that in London museum in 1980, then 1990 saw slightly decline near 3 million in number of visitors. Again it was just as same as that in London museum during 1990 to 1200. Further by ascending constantly returned to near 4 million in 2015.
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[ 1]: We capitalize “Museum” here because it is part of a name.
[ 2]: The Louvre does not have the word “museum” as part of its name.
Thank you very much. You’re so helpful.
sorry what is my score for this writing?
What is your target score, and when are you planning to sit for the test?
I'm trying to get more than 7
You're not far off. Keep practising.