+0
Please correct my letter.

For whom it may concern,

My name is Didoune XXX and I am currently studying Chemistry at the University of XXXX. Even if I am going to obtain my DEA (Diplome d’Etude Approfodie) which is the first year of Doctorate according to the old French academic system, I would like to do a full master program at your university.

I am writing this e-mail to let you know that I would like to apply for the XXX project. This project is a great opportunity for me to study at XXXX university, one of the best universities in the world. To facilitate my application, could you please give me information about documents I should provide and/or people I should contact.

I am looking forward receiving you answer.

Sincerely yours,

Didoune XXX
+0
Dear Sir/Madam,

I would like to apply for the XXX project. This project is a great opportunity for me to study at XXXX university, one of the best universities in the world. To facilitate my application, could you please give me information about documents I should provide and/or people I should contact?

I am currently studying Chemistry at the University of XXXX. Even if I am going to obtain my DEA (Diplome d’Etude Approfodie) which is the first year of Doctorate according to the old French academic system, I would like to do a full master program at your university. I don't understand this paragraph.

And are you applying to be part of a project? Or to do your Master's degree? Or both? It's not clear to me.

I am looking forward to your reply.


Sincerely yours,

Didoune XXX
Comments  
Students: Are you brave enough to let our tutors analyse your pronunciation?
First of all, thank you so much for your reply.Emotion: smile
Actually, my university does not follow the LMD system so I am not sure of the equivlence of my diploma .
The project offers scholarships. Applicants have to contact the partner university of their choice to facilitate the application. I'm currentely studying Physical Chemistry but I would like to apply for a master in Theoretical Chemistry as the kind of scholarship offered for PhD students is not very interesting.
My point is this.
You need to make the reason for your letter clear, right at the beginning. The reader wants to know,'Why is he writng this? What does he want me to do?'

Good luck, Clive