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The line graph shows the number of goods transported in the UK by four means: road, water, rail, and pipeline from 1974 to 2002.
Overall, by the end of the period, rail-transported goods were the only ones to remain within a tight range at approximately the same value. The other three all increased by a factor of about 1.4 to 2.2. The ranks of road and pipeline didn't change over the entire time, while water took over rail's place and ended at third.
In 1974, around 70 million tonnes of goods were transported by road, about 175% of rail's value. While rail-transported goods hit a low in 1995, there was only a slight decrease in the number of road-transported ones. From that point, goods transported by road were increasingly popular, and the figure stood at nearly 100 million tonnes in 2002, almost 2.5 times as high as rail's value.
Between 1974 and 1982, there was an upward trend in both the numbers of goods transported by water and pipeline. However, in the next ten years, these two showed little changes. At this point, the figures were nearly 60 million tonnes and 19 million tonnes, respectively. Although the last ten year of the period saw ups and downs in both water-transported and pipeline-transported goods, pipeline remained the least common means of transport with only around 21 million tonnes, approximately 1/3 of water's value.

The line graph shows the number volume of goods transported in the UK by four means: road, water, rail, and pipeline from 1974 to 2002.

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Overall, by the end of the period, rail-transported goods were the only ones to remain within a tight range at approximately the same value. The other three categories all increased by a factor of about 1.4 to 2.2. The ranks of road and pipeline didn't change over the entire time, while water took over rail's place and ended at third. Moreover, road transport carried the most tonnage, whereas pipeline accounted for the least, with water and rail in between.

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I'm kind of confused, why shouldn't I use the number in my essay? And if I want to express the whole "The ranks of road and pipeline didn't change over the entire time, while water took over rail's place and ended at third.", how should I put it?

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NgTh. HgDIt was lovely to receive your feedback. Thanks so much.

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NgTh. HgDI'm kind of confused. Why shouldn't I use "the number" in my essay?

If you were talking about individual units of something (e.g. cars or houses), then you could use it. Here, you are talking about weight (in tons).

NgTh. HgDAnd if I want to express the whole say "The ranks of road and pipeline didn't change over the entire time, period, while water took over overtook rail 's place and ended at in third position.", how should I put it?

See above.

Thanks so much for your help and kindness. I did make some changes and shorten my work as below. I hope you can give it a look and offer me some advice.


The line graph shows the volume of goods transported in the UK by four means: road, water, rail, and pipeline from 1974 to 2002.

Overall, by the end of the period, rail-transported goods were the only ones remaining within a tight range at approximately the same value. The other three categories all increased by a factor of about 1.4 to 2.2. The ranks of road and pipeline did not change, while water overtook rail and ended in the third position.

In 1974, around 70 million tonnes of goods were transported by road, about 175% of rail's value. While rail-transported goods hit a low in 1995, there was only a slight decrease in the number of road-transported, followed by a rapid increase until there were nearly 100 million tonnes in 2002, almost 2.5 times as high as rail's value.

Between 1974 and 1982, there was an upward trend in the numbers of goods transported by both water and pipeline. The figures were nearly 60 million tonnes and 19 million tonnes, respectively, in 1992. By the end of the period, pipeline remained the least common means of transport with only around 21 million tonnes, approximately 1/3 of water's value.


Anyway, in this sentence "The line graph shows the volume of goods transported in the UK by four means: road, water, rail, and pipeline from 1974 to 2002" can I use the word "amount" instead?

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The line graph shows the volume of goods transported in the UK by four means: road, water, rail, and pipeline from 1974 to 2002.

Overall, by the end of the period, rail-transported goods were the only ones to remain remaining within a tight range at approximately the same value. The other three categories all increased by a factor of about 1.4 to 2.2. The ranks of road and pipeline did not change, while water overtook rail and ended in the third position.

In 1974, around 70 million tonnes of goods were transported by road, 40 by each of rail and water, and only about 5 by pipeline. 175% of rail's value. While The graph for rail-transported goods fell and hit a low in 1995, before recovering to around 40 million tons in 2002. there was only a slight decrease in the number of In contrast, despite some dips in the middle, the one for road-transported goods followed by a rapid increase until there were rose to nearly 100 million tonnes in by 2002. , almost 2.5 times as high as rail's value.

The volume of goods transported by water started rising in 1978, then plateaued and fell in the early nineties, before rising to around 62 million tons by 2002. Finally, pipeline transport rose gradually in linear steps to around 22 million tons by 1995 and stayed at that level for the remainder of the giver period.

Between 1974 and 1982, there was an upward trend in the numbers of goods transported by both water and pipeline. The figures were nearly 60 million tonnes and 19 million tonnes, respectively, in 1992. By the end of the period, pipeline remained the least common means of transport with only around 21 million tonnes, approximately 1/3 of water's value.

NgTh. HgDAnyway, in this sentence "The line graph shows the volume of goods transported in the UK by four means: road, water, rail, and pipeline from 1974 to 2002" can I use the word "amount" instead?

Yes, that's possible.

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May I ask what was wrong with my essay specifically? I just want to learn from that and avoid making the same mistakes in the future.

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