Hello, I'm Chiara. I know my writing English is quite bad, because I'm not used to write at all. I was wondering if somebody could correct my writing task from time to time.

Here it goes:

Dear Sir,
I'm a student at college in Fordham.
My friends and I are writing to you about your article published in your newspaper few weeks ago,
about Fordham town council's proposal to build a large car park where now Greendale Park is.

Our college is right in front of the park, so we can see people going there everyday, that's why we decided to make a small survey among Fordham's residents to know wether they would agree or not with the council's proposal.

Emerging from the survey almost the 80% of the residents go often to the park, while only the 22% never goes.
Among this 80% of people, more then the half of them goes there at least once a week, while 26% goes daily.
The reasons they go, are the most various and different, but all seem to appreciate and enjoy having a green place in their sourrounding, either to have a break during the lunchtime, either to bring their grandchildren to the playground, or to go ad play tennis in the park's tenniscourts.

Seeing the survey's results, we ask Fordham town ouncil to keep Greendale Park in its place and find a better solution for the building of the car park which could be built, as the same residents suggested, either underground either knocking down the empty factory near the river.

We hope Fordham's residents request will be listened by the town council.

Yours faithfully,
students from Fordham's college.

Thanks for all the you can do,

Chiara
ChiaraHello, I'm Chiara. I know my writing English is quite bad, because I'm not used to writing at all. I was wondering if somebody could correct my writing task from time to time.

Here it goes:

Dear Sir,
I'm a student at college in Fordham.
My friends and I are writing to you about your article published in your newspaper few weeks ago,
about Fordham town council's proposal to build a large car park where now Greendale Park is. Avoid using the same word twice - find another word, or rephrase the sentence [discussing/describing/reporting]

Our college is right in front of the park, so we can see people going there everyday. that's why We decided to make conduct a small survey among Fordham's residents to know whether they would agree or not disagree with the council's proposal.

Emerging from the survey The survey shows the following:
- Almost the 80% of the residents go often to the park, while only the 22% never goes there.
- Among this 80% of people, more than the half of them goes there at least once a week, while 26% go daily.
The reasons they go are the most various and different, but all seem to appreciate and enjoy having a green place in their sourrounding [community/environs/district], either to have a break during the lunchtime, either or to bring their grandchildren to the playground, or to go and play tennis in the park's tenniscourts.

Seeing the survey's results, we ask Fordham Town Council to keep Greendale Park in its place and find a better solution for the building of the car park which could be built, as the same residents suggested, either underground or by knocking down the empty factory near the river.

We hope the views of Fordham's residents request will be listened heard by the town council.

Yours faithfully,
The students from Fordham College.

Thanks for all the you can do,

Chiara
Keep your sentences fairly short.
Thank you so much!

My writing is quite bad, because I'm not used to write in English at all. Your corrections are very important to me, I'll study them.

I'm consiuous my writing is not so "consistent".

I hope I can write other proposal letters, reviews etc. in the future, here, to learn and improve through your corrections.

Thank you again,

Chiara