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The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.


The table illustrates the figure for workforces as well as manufacturers involved in silk processing in two different countries, namely England and Wales from 1851 to 1901

Looking from overall perspective, the total of silk workers saw a download trend throughout the given period. Also noteworthy is the fact that, there was a significant growth in the amount of silk manufacturing factories over the 50 years, despite some fluctuation

To begin with, in 1985, with 130,750 employees, the silk producers reached the largest workforce, comprising 76,786 females and nearly 54,000 males. Over the following 41 years, the number of women and men employees steadily fell to 25,567 and 13,375 respectively, followed by a reduction in the average number of workers to 38,942 in 1901

Secondly, the total number of silk manufacturing showed a variating trend. In the first period, there were the lowest number of silk workshops with only 272 factories. Meanwhile, the number of factories saw a slight drecrease in the next years, before falling to 623 in 1901.

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The table illustrates (wrong word) the figure (wrong word) for workforces (wrong word) as well as manufacturers involved in silk processing (wrong word) in two different countries, namely England and Wales from 1851 to 1901 (missing punctuation, incorrect description of the time intervals.)

Looking from Overall perspective, the total of silk workers saw (wrong word - numbers do not have eyes. They cannot see.) a download trend throughout the given period. Also noteworthy is the fact that, there was a significant growth in the amount (wrong word) of silk manufacturing factories over the 50 years, despite some fluctuation (wrong word)


To begin with, in 1985, with 130,750 employees, the silk producers reached the largest workforce, (That is incorrect. The verb "reach" is used incorrectly. You have no idea what the workforce was in 1831 or 1841. It might have been higher than in 1851!) comprising 76,786 females and nearly 54,000 males. Over the following 41 (wrong number. Forty -one years after 1841 is 1882. There is no entry on the table for that year. ) years, the number of women and men employees steadily fell to 25,567 and 13,375 (Those numbers are not in the table.) respectively, followed by a reduction in the average (wrong word) number of workers to 38,942 in 1901 (missing punctuation)

Secondly, (Not a good transition word) the total number of silk manufacturing (wrong usage) showed a variating trend. In the first period, (You have not explained what this "first period" is. You never mentioned the time intervals on the table.) there were the lowest number of silk workshops (wrong word) with only 272 factories. Meanwhile, the number of factories saw a slight drecrease (wrong spelling ) in the next years, (When?) before falling to 623 in 1901.


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The table lists the number of people (male, female and total) employed in the silk industry in England and Wales every ten years between 1851 and 1901. In addition, it records the number of factories.

Overall, the total workforce was the largest in 1851, and it decreased steadily over each ten-year time span. The workforce was always composed of more women than men. In contrast, the number of factories was the smallest in 1851.

In detail, for the 1851 numbers, the size of the workforce was 130,750 and they were employed in 272 factories. giving an average of 480 employees per factory. Ten years later, about 110 thousand people were working in 761 factories, or an average factory employment of 144 employees, so they were 70% smaller. And in 1901, there were only about 60 employees per factory. The men employed in this industry declined from just under 54 thousand to a little over 13 thousand fifty later, a decrease of 75%. The number of women also went down, from nearly 77 thousand to about 26 thousand, a decrease of 66%. However, the proportion of women in the total workforce varied in a narrow range around 60% throughout the period. Two years have erroneous data, 1881 and 1891. In 1881, the sum of the male and female workers is 10,000 less than the total number of employees reported. And in 1891, it is 10,000 more that the total.

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The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.


The table illustrates the figure for workforces as well as manufacturers involved in silk processing in two different countries, namely England and Wales from 1851 to 1901

Looking from an overall perspective, the total of silk workers saw a download trend throughout the given period. Also noteworthy is the fact that, there was significant growth in the amount of silk manufacturing factories over the 50 years, despite some fluctuation

To begin with, in 1985, with 130,750 employees, the silk producers reached the largest workforce, comprising 76,786 females and nearly 54,000 males. Over the following 41 years, the number of women and men employees steadily fell to 25,567 and 13,375 respectively, followed by a reduction in the average number of workers to 38,942 in 1901

Secondly, the total number of silk manufacturing showed a variating trend. In the first period, there was the lowest number of silk workshops with only 272 factories. Mean while, the number of factories saw a slight decrease in the next years, before falling to 623 in 1901.

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