The pie charts illustrate the amount of electricity consumption according to different segments in the East of Australia from 2007 to 2010. Units are measured in percent.

Overall, what stands out from the charts is that the trend of the two pie charts was quite similar between 2007 and 2010. Another intriguing characteristic is that electricity usage in manufacturing and aluminium increased slightly, while all the rest of the sectors remained stable.

Looking in more details, using electricity in residential areas was the most popular, representing nearly 28% in both 2007 and 2010. With the same tendency, commercial electricity usage also remained unchanged at 23% in the period shown. By contrast, transport and agriculture’s electricity consumption only accounted for a tiny fraction in 2007, roughly 1% and 0.8% respectively. However, it didn’t fluctuate 3 years later.

With respect to electricity consumption in manufacturing, in 2007, it represented about 13% and fell by 4% in the next 3 years. Similarly, using electricity in aluminium process also made up 13% of all. Nevertheless, its dropped modestly to 11% in 2010.

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The pie charts illustrate the amount of electricity consumption according to different segments in the East of Australia from 2007 to 2010. Units are measured in percent. (Pie charts are always proportional or percentages of a whole. You do not need to specify the units.)


Model opening. Note the numbers of charts and sectors, and a summary of the different sectors.

The two pie charts, labelled 2007 and 2010, give the proportional amounts of electricity consumed in each of eight different economic sectors located in east Australia. Half of these relate to mining and manufacturing. The other four are agriculture, commercial, transport and residential.

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Overall, what stands out from the charts is that (unnecessary verbiage. This does not describe the information.) the trend (wrong word. Trends are not seen in pie charts with two data points.) The data on the two pie charts was quite similar between 2007 and 2010. Another intriguing characteristic is that (opinion) electricity usage in manufacturing and aluminium increased slightly, while all the rest of the sectors remained the same. stable. (Stable is for dynamic systems. It is not a good choice for two pie charts.)

Looking in more details, using electricity in used for residential purposes areas was the most popular, (wrong word. Popular means that people enjoy it.) representing nearly 28% in both 2007 and 2010. With the same tendency, commercial electricity usage also remained unchanged at 23% in the period shown. By contrast, transport and agriculture’selectricity consumption only accounted for a tiny fraction in 2007, roughly 1% and 0.8% respectively. However, it didn’t (Do not use contractions in formal essays.) fluctuate (wrong word) 3 three (write out small numbers in words, except for data values) years later.

With respect to electricity consumption in manufacturing, in 2007, it represented about 13% and fell by 4% in the next 3 years. Similarly, using electricity used in the aluminium industry process also made up 13% of all. Nevertheless, its dropped modestly to 11% in 2010.


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Paragraph 1: Describe the figure, but not the data content:

The two pie charts, labelled 2007 and 2010, give the proportional amounts of electricity consumed in each of eight different economic sectors located in east Australia. Half of these relate to mining and manufacturing. The other four are agriculture, commercial, transport and residential.

Paragraph 2: Pick out two or three significant observations:

The proportions of electricity usage per sector changed very little between the two years. Two sectors, agriculture and transport, used 1% or less of the total. About 50% was devoted to heavy industries (metals and manufacturing) with the other 50% taken by residential and commercial use.

Paragraph 3: give some other details

The metals industry, which was subdivided into mining, aluminum, and other metals, consumed 34% in 2007 and 38% in 2010. The largest change was in the "other metals" category, which increased by 50%, from 12 to 18 percent of the total. This was offset by a 2% decline in aluminum, from 13 to 11% as mining remained constant, consuming 9% in each year. Manufacturing reduced its relative electricity demand, from 13% in 2007 to 9% in 2010, a decrease of about a third. The residential and commercial sectors had no change, 28% and 23% respectively in each year.

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