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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The two pie charts show the average amount of energy used in each Australian family and the greenhouse gas emissions which stem from this energy use.


Overall, it can be clearly seen from the first graph the Australian people tend to use energy for heating and water heating much more than the others, while water heating is also the most eco-unfriendly energy use in the chart.


An average Australian household uses just only 2% and 4% of energy for cooling and lighting respectively. Heating and water heating, in contrast, are mostly used with 42% and 30%. Additionally, an insignificant amount of energy is consumed for refrigeration and other appliances.


As they are least used, cooling and lighting become the most environmentally friendly needs with just 3% and 8%. Although heating is mostly done, its damage to the environment is not as serious as that of water heating (32%). This figure is followed by 28% of other appliances.

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The two pie charts show the average amount of energy used in each by Australian families and the greenhouse gas emissions which stem from this energy use. (You completely ignored the breakdown by different sources, so your description is inadequate. You must tell the reader how may sectors are on the pie charts and what they are. )


Overall, it can be clearly seen from the first graph the (Those are words without any information content. They do not contribute anything to the essay. Delete them.) Australian people tend to use energy for heating and water heating much more than the others, (what others? You have never mentioned them.)while water heating is also responsible for the most greenhouse gas emissions. the most eco-unfriendly energy use in the chart.


An average Australian household uses just only (You can use either "just" or "only", not both of them.) 2% and 4% of energy for cooling and lighting respectively. Heating and water heating, in contrast, require are mostly used with 42% and 30%. Additionally, an insignificant amount of energy is consumed for refrigeration and other appliances.

As they are least used, cooling and lighting generate the smallest amounts of greenhouse gasses. become the most environmentally friendly needs with just 3% and 8%. (Do not write your opinions or conclusions. Just describe the values on the pie charts.) Although heating is mostly done,(I do not understand this) its damage to the environment is not as serious as that of water heating (32%). This figure (wrong word) is followed by 28% from of other appliances.


You need to combine categories to get the best mark. Also, be careful of drawing conclusions or using descriptive terms that are not in the graphic, such as "eco-friendly" and "damage to the environment." Keep your writing to describing the categories and values that are shown on the plot.

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Sample essay.

In this essay, I compare the proportionate amounts of energy use with the greenhouse gas emissions.


The two pie charts compare the energy consumption and greenhouse gas emissions of six different types of appliances in a typical Australian household. These types are heating, water heating, cooling, lighting, refrigeration and “other appliances”.

Overall, two types, heating and water heating, consume nearly three-quarters of the total energy, and they also account for half of the total emissions. Cooling uses the smallest amount of energy, and gives off the fewest emissions.

Even though it is the largest single user of energy, heating emits proportionately much fewer greenhouse gasses than any of the other types. Its greenhouse gas emissions are 15% of the total whereas it consumes 42% of the energy, about a 1:3 ratio. The worst are refrigeration and lighting. They are responsible for 14% and 8% respectively for greenhouse gas emissions compared to just 7% and 4% for energy usage, a 2:1 ratio. The group of other appliances is marginally better, with 15% of the energy usage and 28% of the greenhouse gas emissions. Water heating, which is second after heating in usage at 30%, causes 32% of the emissions, or approximately a 1:1 ratio.

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The first chart below illustrates the percentage of australian household energy use while the second charts display the green gas emissions which results from the energy use in australia.

Overall, Heating and water account for a significant proportion of energy use while most green gas emissions result from water, heating and other appliances.

Heating and water are the two largest use of energy at 42% and 30% respectively. Other appliances consumes another 15% which is as twice as the percentage of energy used for refrigerator. The proportion of energy consumer for lighting and cooling are both very small at 4% and 2% respectively.

Water heating is also a major source of green gas emissions, making up almost a third of total emissions. The second largest amount of emissions comes from other appliances at 28%. Heating is accounted for 15% of total emissions and this is almost the same as that of refrigerator. The remaining 11% results from lighting and cooling.

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The first pie chart illustrate the average Australian household energy consumption and the second pie chart shows that average household greenhouse gas emissions.


Overall it is clear that majority percent of people in Australia used large proportion of their energy on just three categories. Moreover greenhouse gas also emitted from those large three categories.


In Australia people used 42% of their energy on room heating and emitted 15% of greenhouse gas from it. The household used 30% of energy for water heating, which also produce 32% greenhouse gas which is possessed by the maximum percentage of the chart.

We know the refrigeration produce CFC gas which have a destructive nature for our Ozone layer. Meanwhile the used of 7% of power in refrigeration exhaust 14% of greenhouse gas. Energy used on other home appliance like Microwave, Iron, Washing machine by 15% alongside its produce second largest portion in the chart by having 28% of greenhouse gas emission. 4% of power consume in lighting purpose while it produce double the amount of greenhouse gas of 8%. The smallest slice of the pie is cooling system whichever consume 2% of energy and emitted 3% of greenhouse gas.

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