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Could you check my grammar in the below essay, please?

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Nowadays, using mobile phones and computers is more popular in the modern life so that the ability of face to face communication between people and people is gradually losed . In my opinion, I agree with this idea.

Mobile phones and computers are used popularly in recent years. First, the proliferation of these modern devices has already brought a lot of benefits. For example, computers help people to access the Internet in order that they can work more effective or enlarge a world of knowledge. Second, designs of mobile phones and computers are attractive and convevient. For instance, mobile phones that is produced by Apple has some applications of learning English to help children practicing whenever they want without going to English Center and their parents can save a great deal of money.

On the other hand, using mobile phones and computers too much results in the downfall of communication. First, people spend much time on using these devices instead of meeting others. For example, youngsters have addicted to online game on computer without joining outdoor activities. This will influences not only their social skills but also their communication such as presentation skill. Furthermore, people will be more introvert if they continue to keep this habit. For instance, youngsters who use telephone or computer to suft the Internet regularly may face with mental health problems that is cause of the downfall of ability of communication.

In conclusion, I admit that people have had a tendency to use mobile phones and computers recently and this is related to the downfall of face to face communication in our social life.

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Could you check my grammar in the below essay below, please?

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Nowadays, almost everyone has a mobile phone, and even heir own computer. However, many warn that using the extensive use of mobile phones and computers is more popular in the modern life so that the ability of threatening to diminish face-to-face communication between people. and people is gradually losed . In my opinion, I agree with this idea.

The use of mobile phones and computers are used popularly has become very widespread in recent years . First, the proliferation of because these modern devices has already brought bring a lot of benefits.

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